His Misinterpretation of Us

Try, try one more time...

As I weave the tears of the moon into the form of your smile and place the ignorance of June delicately around my neck, try...

As I evaluate the syllables that drop off of your tongue, as I measure the depth of us by the tone of your voice, and I'll stare, blankly, at the sky as you throw


Dickinson


Into the walls.


You're preoccupied with mediocrity as my toes embarrass themselves with their obsession for the sea, this is not the place for artists and I'm crying for the tide to come in, I'm screaming for the waters of Mexico so I can

Breathe

The sky and exhale the stars, wearing the grin you once stole from the moon.



You're erasing space with the hands that invade my skin, every inch of me is begging you to pour and my legs are covered, still, in January as they wrap themselves around your waist, confusion settles herself under our bed and I'm ignoring her...

Just to be the seconds that escape themselves from the clock and immortalize me in the dragging of my curls between your fingers

It's not...

That complicated, you don't have to understand...

But your smile is choking me and I'm tempted to crack myself open

To let the moon fall out, I'm tempted

To walk, barefoot, all the way to The Gulf of Mexico,

But I'm too preoccupied

With measuring

The depth in you.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

throwing dickinson into the walls...(frown here, she's my favorite)

but she also spent most of her life with imaginary lovers...

i sense that here...yes, there is a physical reality...but is the emotional and mental side there?

does he have depth? beyond words and hands?

another really good poem...

glad i happened on your page.

jacob

[Jeanmarie Flaherty]

Throwing Dickinson into the walls meaning a disrespect for that which I hold dear, literature, her own sensitivity, the pureness of heart.

Thank you for the reviews Sweetie :)

[Gedalya]

^^^ I have to agree, that's a helluva way to say something. It's awesome.

[Jeanmarie Flaherty]

Lol why thank you :)

[Gedalya]

Great read, I believe I'll read some more.

[no sun]

the depth seems to be negative more like an abyss. this is hurt, without the violence but nevertheless painful. as always, a from the very bottom of the soul poem. an excellent write.

[Jeanmarie Flaherty]

Ohhhhhhh you've been missed

[no sun]

and so have you little miss wonderful

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I like the structure of your composition... and the message. There are times when I have felt invisible... alienated from society. This piece certainly struck a chord with me.

[Everett DeValle]

I enjoyed the prose style, it is one favorite formats...the emotions were from the depths of your soul feeling you vent and express the frustration you felt...I've felt it before, just wanting to he somewhere else, yet the obligations burdens itself and paralyze any actions, except to stay. Nicely done.

[Kelly Scheppers]

"As I evaluate the syllables that drop off of your tongue,
as I measure the depth of us by the tone of your voice..."

I believe I've missed your articulation...it's good to be back at the WC.

My best,
Kelly

[Bare Trees]

This is an excellent poem rich with depth. It' actually better than most I've read lately. The formatting is a bit odd for me however as the lines are longer than a breath can handle. Still, a great piece of poetry.

[quinfinn]

some of the finest prose i have perused in many months. well penned.

[russj87]

Miss this place i take it? :p
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