take me there

i just wanna cry

at the open sky

scream my heart out

if he hears me shout

please come back to me

i'll be lost down here

miss those green eyes

so bright used to shine

smile that melt my heart

how they fell apart

i just wanna know

how's it where you are

i'm so numb i can't feel

an emptiness i can not fill

heart died there's only a hole

i just wanted to grow old

with you and no one else

wherever you are take me there

Author's Note

it's my first effort. i'll be happy to hear the reader's opinion, feel free to say whatever you think

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well with the poem. I recommend to read the poem aloud. Allow you to ensure proper flow. I like the emotional ride in the poem.
"i just wanted to grow old
with you and no one else"
Always great pain when things don't fall properly. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[bsg18]

thank you very much,it helped a lot, i'm sure i can do better next time with that help :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing writer. I have been writing for 45 years and I learn new things daily. A good writer read and tried to improve his work.