Long gone....

there just might never be a tomorrow......

I offered you a hand
and I was right there to keep you strong,
but you just never bothered,
and now, you'll miss me,
when I'm gone...

"I don't seek to highlight my absence,
all I want, is you to know,
someday when you realize how I felt,
I just won't be here,
and would be long gone..."

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Great poem. I actually wrote a song called, "Long Gone."
It goes, "Now the clock is ticking by, I dried my eyes a thousand times, you said you'd always be there for me, but now that's all history...but now all I do is sit here alone, patiently waiting by the phone...but now...i'm LONG GONE...."

SO HEY...we get each other.

Kena SunGoddess Dawn

[Aussie]

This is so sad.It sucks coming to terms with letting someone go,
and knowing you might have missed out on so much.Great job.

[The High Poet]

I liked reading this poem! Sad but I love sad poems, I think your message is very clear and precise. Thanks for sharing

[Elizabeth]

This sounds almost ghost-like when I read it in my head. I'm not sure if that description makes sense, but take it as a good thing. Simple words but you say quite a lot about the human condition. Sadly this is a story almost everyone is too familiar with. Good write, keep it up. 100/100

[mnisha]

simple yet strong... love the piece... small poems always leave a better effect on readers...:)

[LisetteCanWrite!]

This I found kind of sad compared to so many of your other previous writings! A sense of offering someone assistance and being turned down perhaps? Definitely mysterious and seemingly personal.. I hope you find solace in the fact you offered such generosity.. which is a pretty big thing! I sensed alot of concern in this one.. hopefully the other realizes your intentions.. great outpouring!

[deeps]

This is wonderful, such an enjoyable read here.
LIke the emotions you have put into this.
Very well written