I'm your fool....

just some feelings that needed to be vent out.....

Your ignorance, it kills me...
Your name resounding in my head,
it stabs me...
These feelings in my heart,
they mock me...
Cos you just can't accept me,
and I just can't escape thee...
You unloved me, at your will,
just left me, dying...
My beating heart...
Now still...

Author's Note

Ode to a heart breaker...

Reviews

[poetic soul]

you unloved me!!!
my o my!!
that was so pricking!
thats how some people are....
they love and can even undo it at their whims and fancies...
too good!!!
short n crisp!
mayb a heart breaker doesnt need any more words to be wasted on them!!! ;)

:) Smile,
Krishna

[~Wandering Soul~]

this is powerful writing
well done, i enjoyed this piece =]

~Wandering Soul~

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW ... very very nice indeed !!!
Marvelously written and understood ...
What feelings you have wrought I dare say
What feelings indeed!!!

A masterpiece of pain !!!

[Jason]

brilliant.... totally relate. such the "ode". great work

[♡Moon Child♡..]

wow! That was amazing! wow...struck me to my very core. such a short poem, but really makes you think! 5 stars! ^^

[Avocations of Amber]

Powerful write here. I like how you emphasized your emotions with the word, "unloved." The raw imagery of a dying love represented by a stilled heart was good too.

[Wallflower]

Cos you just can't accept me, and I just can't escape thee....... vividly precise.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That was quick and brutal, it certainly reflects just how painful losing love can be.

[Jillian Alexis]

i love this. short and simple yet very powerful! good write.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

my heart has been broken many times, i know the feeling, great write

[Aussie]

nice, 'you unloved me'.this is a good,simplistic piece,i really enjoyed it.its easy to relate to and actually feel,it was great(: