I'm your fool....

just some feelings that needed to be vent out.....

Your ignorance, it kills me...
Your name resounding in my head,
it stabs me...
These feelings in my heart,
they mock me...
Cos you just can't accept me,
and I just can't escape thee...
You unloved me, at your will,
just left me, dying...
My beating heart...
Now still...

Author's Note

Ode to a heart breaker...

Reviews

[poetic soul]

you unloved me!!!
my o my!!
that was so pricking!
thats how some people are....
they love and can even undo it at their whims and fancies...
too good!!!
short n crisp!
mayb a heart breaker doesnt need any more words to be wasted on them!!! ;)

:) Smile,
Krishna

[Enigma]

Quite a fierce yet justified take on heartbreaks. Some people don't value feelings and hence, hurt the one who might care for them the most in the world.
Great job. :)

[ajasminewallflower]

Wow this was such a passionate emotionally charged poem. Its really intense and it just stabs you in the heart because you know how that feels. Great write

[Vaishali..^_^]

this was so beautiful..!so painful...I can understand those feeling of yours related with this poem..!! It's really painful to be unloved by someone you loved so much..:)
great write...
thanks for sharing..^_^..

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a raw piece, I know those feelings that pent up inside you! This captures that feeling so well

[TeenRomance2]

Heartbreak Suxx

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A great, succinct write - straight to the bitter point. Well done. I have certain people I would certainly like to mark these words on. Nice job!
Light,
SiddARTha

[R.S. Wilder]

"These feelings in my heart,
they mock me...
Cuz you just can't accept me,
And I just can't escape thee..."

Painful words...real and honest. A true ode, to be sure.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I applaude you on this one. I really loved it. I love reading and writing about heartbreak, probably because it's an emotion and feeling I have come so use to experiencing unfortunatley. (lol) Keep writing. I love your style.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"Cos you just can't accept me,
and I just can't escape thee...
You unloved me, at your will,"

This is so raw and vivid and yet so deep and thoughtful, simple but yet very heartfelt..
I felt as if you have ripped your heart out here in this piece man!
This was awesome...
A reader can actually feel the time duration between the last beat of heart and the stillness.
I absolutely loved this piece!

[Stephanie990]

That is speaking from the heart, truly. That was a magnificent poem. Very well written. The worst just speak to me since I've had my own personal experience with heart breaks but this has captivated me. I loved this poem.