The war within....

There's a war waging within me

that threatens to devour my whole...

Lead to a drastic transformation

or just leave me with this soul...

It's a battle between the furious two...

One is who I was

and the other my alter ego...

Just the somebody I am

versus what I might change into...

The outcome decides my fate, my future

and just what I'm gonna be...

The selfless, loving heart that I was

or an evil, dark, gruesome creature!!!

It's the battle between my heart and mind...

and my patience is being tortured!!!

It's ego pitted against love once more...

The trecherous war, truly one of a kind!!!

 

It's a war waging within me

threatening to devour my whole!!!!

Author's Note

ehh....

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

great job! i know i have written MANY poems like this. about the battle between good and evil. this "war" in side of yoursleves. read "detainee." so I had background knowledge before reading this wonderfully penned piece. I like your style, it appeals to me. however, maybe too many uses of the exclamation mark? i usually don't even use it at all. but overall, amazing. truly.

[Jason]

A war indeed, that is battling within so many....even those who choose to ignore it. It is what I believe balances our mind and soul, allowing them to coexist. An "alter ego" if you will.... Some may claim it to be "crazy", others believe it is "crazy" to ignore it. Excellent write, and subject....most of us as writers know of our alter ego, and many of us have given that person a name. This subject, body of work, and "war within" are all so close to the heart. Thank you for sharing this. I love it!

Jay

[17thWhitePrince]

Not bad at all !!!!
Really well written!!!!
Just marvelous!!!!

We all fight our own battles

[Jola]

enslaves the mind and often lose the meaning of life, but our eyes are the mirror of the soul ... well-written poem ... full of inspiration ...
Greetings Jola

[QuietPoet]

I loved this. You expressed this well. Heart and mind will always be a factor. We will always follow each. In the end, you will find which to go with. =) Nicely done.

[♡Moon Child♡..]

That is...amazing. The heart and mind are such two different aspects of ourself that it's a rare and wonderful thing when they're both telling us the same thing. Great write, Vin!^^

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Ah yes the heart and mind - such different creatures! It is very difficult to mend the two together. A nice succinct write. I can feel the struggle and have all too often been devoured myself. Kudos!
Light,
Siddartha

[Tracie Skarbo]

I like the dance between heart and mind you have rendered within. It has an undertone of vilolence that is raging under bonds threatening to become unraveled. I am not sure if this is what you had in mind but it certainly speaks to me this way. Will look forward to reading more of your work.

[deeps]

The battle bewteen heart and mind
Will go on forever.
The heart rules the mind or is it the mind rules the heart?
This is well expressed and well written.

[Brianna Brie]

It's a battle between the furious two...
One is who I was
and the other my alter ego...
Just the somebody I am
versus what I might change into...

This is deep. It is a good delve into the human mind. Great write!