That night....

the dark night that changed it all...the night that saw no day......

It's post mid night

as the phone rings...

he reaches to it

almost in shivers to see her name flashing...

he answers the call...

"Hello" she says

his heart skips a beat

as he hears her voice...

stirring the deepest of his cores

he'd been dying to hear her

ever since they last fought...

but his heart sank low...scared as to what made her call

his lip quivers as he talks...

 

his fears came true as she spoke those dredged words

"I'm stepping out of your life...I just can't take it anymore..."

before he could get a hold of his dying self

and that heart  that just stopped beating

before any word could escape his frozen self

she hung up on him with a last "good bye"....................

 

He dropped to his knees

as tears escaped his eyes

he lay there on the ground

his black heart burnt in pain.....

 

Everthing stood still in the silence

his loss the darkness mourns

as died a heart full of love

at the hands of hate filled thorns...

 

"His heart was truly shattered that night

he lost his vibrant soul

he swore to die with her memories

rather than just let go...."

 

 

 

Reviews

[Jason]

This is deep and powerful. I really like the way it captures the two sides after a fight, where one is ready to move on and the other is more excited about the chance at their love again. Really well written, and in all honesty it kind of reminds me of my past a bit. Thank you for sharing. I am going to add this to my favs if you don't mind.

[~Wandering Soul~]

very deep and very powerful
i am sure many people can relate to this feeling, maybe not the circumstance but the feeling of being so deeply lost
once again a pleasure to read
yours ~Wandering Soul~ x

[Natasha Leanne]

wow.. this is so deep. I have shared this same feeling after losing someone. You feel empty inside, shattered so much that you can't accept that its over. Thank you for sharing this emotion with me, I loved it. Where ever you heart lays now I hope it's feeling better.

[Ignorance Was Bliss Eve..]

What I felt when I read this piece.
It's unexplainable. I almost Broke in tears
From something I once felt. I wish to never feel again..
Great work.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow ... this is amazing i really like this... I feel the pain

[♡Moon Child♡..]

Tragic love always makes for a good storyline, but it makes me sad to know you went through this. Great write though!*hugs* 100%!^^

[Shadow of Sunshine]

there's nothing for me to say except...this is a f*****g work of art!!! congradulations, i think its really good, very powerful and intense...

[Divine Pain]

This was a nice poem....Sorry I didn't read it sooner...I have a very busy life.But this was a very good piece I enjoyed both sides of the story.

[funeralmoon]

very powerful.. it makes me want to cry it sturs up memories that hurt for me but this is why this piece is so good.. very good job.. pain makes poetry :)

[shythatway]

You really captured the moment of heartbreak in this piece. To me, the most painful part was the second one. That moment when you helplessly search for that one thing to say that might change things, but it's all just a big void that will later be filled with 'what if's'. Thank you for sharing.

[Lady V]

Beautiful love poem. Its really deep because most people do die with their feelings for a person. They do not die physically but emotionally. A piece of them dies. That can be thr romance, the joy, the laughter, honesty, forgiveness or just the energy to be with someone else.

Great piece

Live, Love and Learn

Lady V