My bleeding heart...

All i am left with after writing this one...are tears, surging pain and aches...feels as thou am watching my own wrists slit through...and bleeding all the way

"He walks towards the door...
bleeding his heart over the floor...
she stands behind watching...
not a single word out calling..."

 

Standing in the rain,
getting drenched to the core,
each drop feeds on my pain,
the wounds afresh and pure...

My eyes they swell with tears,
the heart aches and longs for you,
haunting me were all my fears,
they won over me and came true...

You slammed the door of your heart,
leaving me all alone shattered,
in a fraction of a second, you just tore me apart,
with just thoughts in my mind and unanswered questions scattered...

You say I've changed...

I was never perfect,
but I tried hard to be...

I opened my heart to none,
but with you even that begun...

I was never the kind you wanted...
but now that i am...
you still got me haunted...

 

"numbness still brims over my soul...
blood feels ice cold...
am turning blue...
freezing with the loss of you..."

Reviews

[Fredrick Malkyor]

Dear Barricade,

I can feel the deep depression that is flowing out of the character like a waterfall of pain. No one is perfect, so why does everone try to be. Those who think that they are perfect is only seeing a mirage of their reflected selves. The only thing you can do is to just be your self in this matter.

Your Friend,

Fredrick Malkyor

[Stephanie]

I agree with Shellie, about the unbreakable hearts. This had so much pain in it, and I know so many people (myself included) can relate. Sometimes I wish for a fraction of a second that heartbreak didn't exist, but then I remember we all have to go through that and the love we experienced was worth it. Really great job, I loved it!

[Shellie]

The heart will never be practical until its made unbreakable!

Intense feelings here, and 'painful' flow if that makes any sense at all but it really does sound like its flowing painfully. The hurt is evident your words set that up very well.

i like this:
You slammed the door of your heart,
never heard that before!

nicely penned!

[EpicKizzy]

very deep very good♥

[Jwana Creer Yeshua]

Great poem. I love how you set up the poem. Everything flows really nice together. Just remember people do change. An there is nothing we can do about it. But when we lose someone, someone new and exciting enters our lives. Love the poem. Great work! I will be looking for more in the near future.

Humbly,
Jwana Creer Yeshua

[Linda Stinson]

Oh now, I can't stand the breaking heart. It breaks mine, it touches a nerve. I feel your pain. You did some outstanding writing here, my hat is off to you. Drips with emotion and the way you expressed yourself, well it threw me right on sight. I felt like I was at the scene. Great job! It is really awesome.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

there's nothing like a good heartache poem, and you did this well. i love the "bleeding heart" concept...leona lewis perhaps?

my fav part:

numbness still brims over my soul...
blood feels ice cold...
am turning blue...
freezing with the loss of you..."

you talk about hurt and pain and loss in such a poetic way. nice job barricade!!

[Slender Smile/Husna Tay..]

Oh....:(
So sad barricade.....
I have tears in my eyes right now.......:(
I dont know what to say but it just hurts when someone is in so much pain.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow very heartbreaking... we can always try to change to be the person someone wants but then you are not being true to yourself and the other person usually walks... a very powerful write.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. this is heartbreaking and very painful ... such fierce sadness.. I could feel such darkness and loneliness throughout this writing.. a deep pain of loosing someone so special.. I know that feeling too well.. more than once I felt that pain.. I hope this is to be continued .. with a more divine love that can heal those wounds.. have to push on.. for every door that slams a new one is out there .. you just have to find it! Does the one who slammed the door know how hurt you are? What a terrible thing.. I am at a true loss of words.. speechless so to say!!! Great emotional write.. keep it up!!! =)