Fading away...

just a snippet of the visuals i see...the moment my eyes shut, drifting me away from all that there be. just a nightmare or my dark reality????

You walk into a room with darkness all around...
i lay unconscious, numb, dirty on the ground...
my lips all stitched...
my body all ripped...
cuts and bruises bleeding...
in silence; voices screaming...
you see nothing, but can hear them all...
with desperate nail marks on the wall...

violent screams fill the room...
sarcastic laughter amongst the gloom...
shadowy figures here and there...
mocking eyes with a stony stare...

i still lay numb, all cold with fear...
my body shudders with utmost despair...
voices grow louder, tormenting me...
tears of blood flowing free...

i try to move, but all in vain...
a spasm within and searing pain...
i stretch out for help to save my existence...
the darkness engulfs me
i fade away into obsolescence...

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

try to move, but all in vain...
a spasm within and searing pain...
i stretch out for help to save my existence...
the darkness engulfs me
i fade away into obsolescence...


An intense and powerful piece describing how nightmares

certainly can put one in freeze frame~ no way to escape them

you capture this frightning feeling of being trap within its darkness

with vivid decriptives so very well written! Superb Pen!

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW ... not bad at all
What a dark reality this would prove to be
Very well described in each of its horrible splendor
WoW

[Spoken]

a moment of pure madness. Expressing the torture of your soul being consumed. This darkness does exist. it's a horrible thing. we can either fight it, or give in. Our best defense is our choices...

haunting imagery well displayed

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Such a sad dark write. Very well expressed emotions. Well written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Alucard]

I have had dreams like this for the last year after going through some life changing experiences. Man I know what this is like and I wish they would stop.. I have felt insignificant and less then a man since. Outstanding verbalization of visions most often painful to express.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

I occassionally have some pretty bad dreams.. this captures somewhat a glimpse of it.. not all the same but the emotion in this is deep.. ravaging.. trying to find meaning or sense of it.. it is fear itself manifesting! You have some pretty great flow and rythme in this and I tried reading it over a couple of times to see the parts that really stand out the most...it all does!!! Thank you for sharing your riveting dark dream reality.. it has some reality to some extent if you experience it and feel it!!! =)