Walled in...

It takes a real man to break the walls built by a woman...

Look into her eyes,
step down to her mystic soul.
The history of her yesteryears,
painted on her whole.

She has built around herself,
walls sky high.
Saving all there is,
From every passer by.

These walls they have a window,
Which she always hides.
A certain someone might see through,
Her crystal clear disguise.

She wears her best mask,
To survive each moment.
Faking a perfect smile,
Masquerading her inner torment.

Fighting her own self,
Through her darkest night.
Suppressing a plethora of emotions,
Waiting for some light.

She says "It takes a real man
to break the walls I build"
I say "He'll knock them down
with love iron willed!"

He will see right through her,
penetrating thickest of her wall.
He will take the leap of faith,
to break her every fall.

He is real as real can be,
for her smile he shall live.
To see her through from dark to light,
a thousand lives he shall give.

Author's Note

inspired by and written for... someone.

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

Those time tested fortifications, they really are a tangled maize.

I like the journey this takes the reader on, these are well drawn paths.

Thank you for the read.

this part here:

"He will see right through he, .... the last he is that supposed to be there?
penetrating thickest of her wall.
He will take the leap of faith,
to break her every fall."

Other than that it reads easily.

[barricade]

Corrected. :)

[Broken.buddy]

Wow, I know a woman, who actually says those words. Deja vu. Wonderful read and well done.

[anne]

This is very relatable to not only just women but anyone who has built up walls around themselves, and anything relatable automatically hits home.
The rhyme scheme keeps it lively also, so Good job :)

[Reneé H]

This is really sweet! I like the rhyme scheme and the flow, they both work really well. I think the theme is so true of women and I like the ending, it seems genuine and sincere. Great job!

[Carolann Dowsett]

This really moved me, to think a guy would even bother trying to break down a girls walls is a beautiful thing. A great write.

[barricade]

im glad you liked it :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

I do :-)

[Robert James Parfett]

Has a lovely flow. Great stuff. Aren't women mysterious and wonderful beings?

[barricade]

They sure are...the mystique is what makes them beautiful and so charmingly powerful beings.

[Carnation]

A lovely and fantastic poem. You should enter it in my Live Lyric and Poem contest. It'll make a great contestant.

[17thWhitePrince]

Awe this poem speaks of such Love and Truth !!!

"He is real as real can be,
for her smile he shall live.
To see her through from dark to light,
a thousand lives he shall give."

What a beautifully well written and well composed poem for sure !!!
It's just really lovely and well versed . . . you did an excellent job with this one =D

Definately one of my favorites !!!

[A. H. Pinley]

Though we've been wounded before by those that wish to take advantage of us, one day someone come along to protect us and love us. A good reminder of that.

[Touché Armada]

now it's good