Why?

This is what we sometimes feel in our hearts.

Why?

My heart, a brittle leaf...

Cold winter winds pushing...

Carrying it...

To nowhere.

 

Why?

The signs of summer...

Fading to fall...

The leaves of fall...

Dissolving to winter.

 

Why?

To me...

The water has gone...

The brooks and streams dried up...

Decaying.

 

Why?

A lone feather...

Falls from a bird...

Night falls upon...

This world.

 

Why?

The leaf...

Dried, brittle at the edges.

Tinged with bitter...

Hopelessness.

 

Why?

 

Author's Note

Feel free to comment on this one...I wrote it out of boredom while staring at the signs of fall. This is not one of my favorite's, so just comment on whatever mistakes you can find.

Reviews

[Kaitlynn A. Black]

You know what I loved about this?! I loved how we get a slight vision of one's heart in the first stanza, so we know it's probably got to be about how one's heart might be feeling. Yet, as the words continue and the lines build, the descriptive imagery is all about the flow of the Autumn Season, as it spin itself into the chill of winter.
In other words, each stanza is a metaphor as to what the heart might be feeling! =D

While it's not nice to have a cold heart, the poetry invoked by such an idea is beautiful! The flow and layout and use of italics really worked well to keep the vibrancy of the piece throughout.

Awe-Se-Um!
XO - Kate

[Lone Wolf]

Thanks a lot, Kate! Yes, I agree it's not good to have a cold heart, I was painting a metaphor about what it feels like to have one.
It's great to know that you like my poem! Thanks a lot!
~~Shadow

[Mockingbird]

these questions and images are ones that require contemplation and meditation. conveys desolation and despair. the ending of summer and the transition into fall can be depressing, at least for me it is. there is wisdom to be gathered in this poem. great job.

[Lone Wolf]

Thank you so much, Mockingbird!
I appreciate your feedback and I'm glad you think this way about the poem. Thanks for taking the time to read and review!
~Owl

[Anna Blackburn]

I really like this poem! I just think that the ...'s should be commas and, for some lines, semi-colons. In the last stanza, you should say 'Tingled with bitterness' and 'Hopeless'. Other than that this is beautiful.

[Lone Wolf]

Thank you, Anna!
I appreciate your feedback, especially with the ...'s. However, 'bitter hopelessness' is a more elaborate way to describe how I feel when I wonder 'why?'.
Thanks for the feedback! I appreciate your time to stop by and read!
~Owl

[Ees]

There are so many good why questions and we cannot learn without that one little word. In this poem you turn a beautiful change of seasons and renewal period into something rather depressing and I feel like you don;t really care for the answer as to why, it is more about feeling in it. I think that it is beautifully told though and while I would never have chosen the images that you did to represent such feelings, I think it was well done! and I feel like a reader can just chill in that hopelessness.

Great job!

[Lone Wolf]

Thanks so much, Ees! Yes, this work was not to address the answer to 'why?', it was to express the feelings shown in that question. An answer would be a whole new poem with a whole new feel to it!
Thanks for your time to review and read!
~Owl

[Vria P Crow]

The speaker has an eye for detail within his surroundings. The Fall appears to have negative connotations to it rather than the beauty of it. Subjectively, autumn is a time to let yourself be captive to our memories, and perhaps accepting mortality.

Beautiful work, indeed.

[Lone Wolf]

Thanks, Ria! Yes, now that you mention it...autumn does sound more captivating than fall...
Thanks for taking the time to read and review! I really appreciate it!
~Owl

[Vria P Crow]

You are very welcome. :)