Bird of Fire

A poem about rebirth and renewal.

 

 

There are times...

When we want to fly.

Soar away from our troubles...

Into the dark night sky.

 

There are times...

When a diamond tear flows...

We flee from this alien place...

And return home.

 

A tune of weary courage.

When the phoenix inside you sings.

A tune of renewal and grief and joy.

Of the good things life shall bring.

 

There are times...

When you just can't do it anymore.

When everything is lost.

Both the ground and the floor.

 

When mourning and agony flashes.

When you want to crumple to ashes.

When you want to just die.

When the whips of Fate lashes.

 

There are times...

When the stars are just your tears.

When the moon is your agony.

And the night sky your fears.

 

There are times...

When your flames slowly fade...

When you sigh and fall to the ground...

When dark ashes are made.

 

Our heart, living too long, has a hole.

Then you give up and let go.

When you let life take you...

Wherever its currents flow.

 

There are times...

When you're wingless and gone.

Your painful torture...

Stretched for much too long.

 

There are times...

When you are too tired to even cry.

When the only thing you can do...

Is let out a tearful sigh.

 

There are times...

When our life comes to an end...

When a break creates a breach...

Not even the strongest thing can mend.

 

Something inside us is broken.

When you burn to the ground.

But there are times...

When you rise from where you went down

 

Then courage your renewed heart shall bring.

When your flames flicker across your wings...

When the fire inside you keeps fighting...

When the tune of the phoenix sings.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Antoñyo]

Love the feel and flow here, then some words and lines are brilliantly spoken...to hit home

Thanks for the share

[Lone Wolf]

Thanks for the feedback, Antonyo!

[Antoñyo]

You're very welcome

[Wolfwind]

This my friend has a great many things that have value. Yet, the long length and first line repetition was a bit overdone in my opinion. Perhaps collapsing it a bit, so that the stanzas are a 1 and 6, rather than the 1 and 3 that you have now. Just my idea's musing about in my head as I read this.

It think the overall flavor is a good one. The idea that the phoenix's song is the spark that keeps us all going is a wonderful feeling and image to bring across. it's just... as you say... There are times... when repetition becomes oppression. ;)

I shall leave it as saying, awesome idea, the form and flow could be tweeked. =)

Aaron - Wolfwind

[Lone Wolf]

Thanks so much for the review, Aaron! I know, I did not proofread, I must admit. Thank you again for commenting on my errors. I love it when people do that because everyone can improve. I often think my readers are just to afraid to state my mistakes.
Thanks for the review!

[costa siwale]

I like this! Good imagery..

[Lone Wolf]

Thanks a lot for your feedback!