manly form

stupid poem

Manly Form

 

Toil invented the male form �"

Emaciated and hungry.

Its absence spoils the male form �"

Indulged and fleshy.

 

The gaze becomes thin and hungry with exertion �"  

 

The male form has a maw

That will say anything to all.

Form with semi function

Creation or destruction?

 

Trying to find logic in a mad world.

Trying to come, by a beautiful girl.

 

Men will be defeated in the battle with evolution.

Reviews

[Lucas Ascot]

The last three lines of this piece is exceptional.It encapsulates the progression of mankind's conscience.First trying to make sense of his existence.Then trying to find a mate who can give meaning to his existance.All the while suspended over the inevitability that he must evolve in a world he does not fully understand or be conquered by it

[Dave M. Pitman]

Very good!

[SilentLucy]

This is exceptional.

[Nameless]

Good job.