Iwishyouknewaboutmyfeelings

Sad but real

Idk I don’t know why

I’m like this I think I

love you but can I

really be sure and if I do

it’s not like I could tell

you because you

have somebody

and everyone I know

likes you but they don’t

know you like I do it’s like

we’ve connected on

a whole other level maybe

I’m just a mere friend

to you but I love you

The way you look at me

I know you don’t look at

her that way I know you don’t

tell her the things you

tell me and I know she’s

not your future I’m probably

not either but

that’s okay I just need

to know we have a chance

someday and I’ll keep holding

one cause all I can do

is pray that one day you’ll get away

that we’ll get away alone somewhere

we won’t talk well just listen listen

to the birds problems evrn the

crickets problems because at that very

moment we’ll have no problem

in the world and you’ll hold my

close as we watch the sky that

made our fate align but I also worry

I hade my chance with you and I

blew it because how can there

be one fish in the sea for everyone

when there isn’t only one sea

I feel like we are in 2 different seas

separated by 2 way glass where I

watch you be happy with her but I

also see you when you fart sad at

the end of the day when it all goes

away and your not fufilled

But I could get to you if I broke the

glass But breaking the glass

Would mess everything up

And it would cut many other fish and I

would lose some fish forever there

would also be a possibility I could

lose the most important fish,

you because honestly idk what

you would do you’d probably push

me away and leave with her and I

can see why I would too she’s

perfect She’s never been hurt like

me and you she it the tape to your

broken mirror pointing out every flaw but

she is temporary and I and the

broken table your broken mirror

sits apon because together we

don’t look so broken.

Author's Note

Ijustshouldn'tfeel

Reviews

[David Elijah]

Criticism: To be honest, I'm not sure of the purpose of chopping it up like that in that format. There might be a good reason but in the perspective of the reader, or just me, it seems to serve little purpose. Also, spelling errors are "I’ll keep holding *on* cause all I can", "the birds problems *even* the crickets problems", and "you’ll hold *me* close as we watch".

Praise: This is so moving. I love the analogy of there being two seas divided by glass and such. Has he read this? I think you should show this to him but I don't even know the full story so my irl advice is not valid. I digress, it would show him your true thoughts and feelings. Reading this poem made me feel warm and it's very lovely. It was smart to give so much emotional context in order to fuel the significance and power of the following metaphors and imagery :)

[Your future]

thank you so much I have no idea why i formatted it like that it was just kinda a late night thing and I know I should tell him but we're close friends he's taken and I had my chance and I just don't want to ruin anything you know.

[David Elijah]

Understandable. I know how frustrating it can be to hold yourself back. Also, now that I think about it, I'd kinda like to think that the poem is broken up into seemingly random lines to represent how broken one feels when their mind is occupied by these thoughts

[David Elijah]

Like these are literally broken thoughts :o

[Your future]

Wow i’m shook That’s so true lmao 😂