Breaking Chains

i dont know were all this is coming from right now bit its comming out fast with the other four I just wrote...

Breaking chains is hard to do,

When you know that it lyes with in you,

We sometimes we hurt and dont know what to do,

But we need to fight not feel so damn blue,

 

Break the chain that is holding you back,

Live a strong life and never look back,

Change your self for the better,

Cause living a great life is so much better,

 

Break that cahin as hard as you can,

Say to your self I know that I can,

I can be strong and bold and live a healthy life,

But you will have to be the one to stand up and fight,

 

Fight for what you believe is right,

Dont take life for granted at least not tonight,

Be bold, strong and beautiful,

To be honest you shadow is there to guide you,

 

Like the angel do when they follow you,

Look up to god and just believe,

That the tears you shed can be gone and free,

So break that chain its not hard to do,

Thats all I have in life to tell you.

 

 

Author's Note

breaking the chain of a bad life

Reviews

[Jane Doe]

A very powerful and inspiring piece. So many people are enslaved and in chains to so many different things, addiction, alcoholism, materialism, etc. and often they don't realize it, or they have lost hope that they will ever be free. It is hard to break those chains, but it can be done. Thanks for sharing!

[Pj]

I'm right there with you sister!
"Breaking chains is hard to do"
You're so right!!
Nice job!

[Yvette Shaw]

Excellent poem, great content. You have done a great job of expressing what you know to be true. Finding the strength inside, is the greatest power that we have. Great job!!!

Yvette Shaw

[Mr. Lopez]

Again I felt as though the message that you send is a strong one. Although the construction could use some more thought. I think that prior to posting ,reading a poem aloud helps me to get a better feel for the flow and how it will be received by others. Do I sound too redundant here or can I re-arrange the words to fit better there ,without compromising the message that i am trying to convey? Am I being too repetative there and if so can i use a different word and get the same meaning out of the sentence.....and so on. These are just little tools that i use on my own poetrty. I am not a trained professional nor do I have any formal training. I am just a amature poet that is winging it and finding creative ways to keep my readers interested in reading my work. I grow with each and every constructive review and hopefully it shows in my newer works. Keep up the good work and let the words poure out of you !