Baby shaking syndrome

I redid this poem so maybe more people can undersatnd what I feel and mean by this peom...Please tell me what you think now that it is changed ty...

 

 

 

                  BY: Belinda Draper

Baby shaking syndrome is not a lovely sight,

Why do people hurt them?

you know its just not right,

They shake them cause there crying,

They beat them really bad,

I want to sit and cry cause I think its really sad,

Babies don’t deserve this,

When all they want is love,

They want the hugs and kisses,

And for you to show your love,

But instead you sit and shake them,

Causing them so much pain,

Not know that your killing them,

Bringing forth what I call a shame,

You parents have no rights to act so absurd,

Theses babies end up in hospitals,

Or even in a casket for a burial,

Where is the justice for theses babies now?

They would live a healthy life,

You if were not around,

I think you belong in jail,

Never again to see the sunlight,

Giving the sentence of death,

So you know what you did to them,

Is a sin and a awful sight.

I hope that God gives you what you deserve,

For you to go to hell,

Finally letting justice be served,

And maybe in life now people will learn,

If you cant handle them then please give them up,

So the kids can live what I call a real life on earth.

Author's Note

this is a poem about baby shaking syndrome that I wrote for babys who cant defend there slef.

Reviews

[Lisa]

The subject is heartbreaking but very true. You can feel your anger when you read the words. Very good poem. You may want to run your work through spell check. There a re few mis spelled words in it. Not enough to alter the meaning in the poem though.

[Yvette Shaw]

This is an excellent poem. You make a great point, I have a four year old son, and I still can't understand how people can hurt a child. Your right, people are insane, and I don't understand how a person has to have a license to drive a car, yet anyone can have a child. Well done!!!

Yvette Shaw

[Kristopher L. Bageant]

Wow, Powerful poem. Keep it going.

[Rain]

Great topic. Just to help you, ok. Not to say anything about your content. You spelled self..slefs shaking..shanking/ instead..insted...their you spelled there/ insane you spelled insaine. I'm terrible on spelling and get corrected all the time. Get a spell check, it just makes the piece look cleaner. I love that you brought attention to a common tragedy. Just slow down and look before you post. I will not rate you low, because it was heart felt and sincere, and that means alot to me. I have studied this tragedy, You would be shocked at how many of these are done my boyfriend left to babysit. It's incredible. Rain..

[Jenny Davis]

All I can say is that I am glad you wrote about this tragedy...it is so sad that we live in a world where the meek are picked on by the stronger...good job :)

[larryb]

Great subject to keep in the public eye, baby shakers are on my list of molesters and beating up 90 year old women....

[TamerQtaish]

I wont say more than one word!
defend!

We must all defend those children!
And from the bottom of my soul I thank you and solute you for this poem!
Please spread it on!

All the best,
Tamer Qtaish

[Brenda Sue]

It is apparent that you are crying from the heart to make people aware of a serious problem. The flow is a little off but the message is great.

[JC Fox]

This was a great poem and touches on a subject that some people may wish to ignore.

[Legion]

I know how you feel. I can't imagine why people hurt little babies. If some one did that to my grandson, I would do more than shake them until their brains rattled. A lot more. Great piece. Glad you pointed this out.