your love is my drug

            Your love is my drug

                           I can't be without it

                       with out you I can't consitrate
                                      
                                     your my life

                               i day dream about you

                             you mean the world to me

                         what would i do with out you

    

        P.S.Who are you?Have I found you?Do I know you?Are you in my life?   

Reviews

[José Humilde]

I am very much enjoying the concept of this write. I like how it turned out, but I think there are a few ways where you can build on what you have going here.

I like the title, it pulls me in very quickly.

I was thinking, that you could compare what drugs do to a person, to what this person does.

for example, how a drug alters your concentration, keeps you up at night, can get you hyper, get you mellow, get you angry, sad, change your perception.

It can do a lot of things...and I would of liked to have seen what your love does (keeping this thought of what drugs do)

Another tangent I would like to see is what it's like WITHOUT his/her love.

Somebody that uses drugs, without them, they go through withdrawals. They get headaches, aggravated, depressed, shakes, get cold, etc etc...

I think some sort of explanation like this in your poem would be awesome!

I definitely hope to see this develop into something more.

Thanks for the great concept and read!

-JH

[kayla garcia]

thnx every1

[*Always be Me:)*]

this is cute.
i like this.

[deeps]

I think this is a wonderful write.