If I had a fantasy with you in it it would be cause?

   If  I had  fantasy  you would be in it!! CAUSE?                        
                  you mean soooooo much to me
                 i dream about you every night

                            i see you in my future

                              i want to have kids with you

                                    i want to marry you

    i want to meet your family

            i love you with all my heart and soul

                 i  love to cuddle with you

                          you mean the world to me

                                

Reviews

[José Humilde]

Nice poem. You have a different style than from myself, but I like diversity. I think to make this poem stronger, you could perhaps put these sequences into a chronological order. For instance, when you mention kids THEN marriage, It kind of thows me off. Call it the old conservative man in me, but to me that makes a bit more sense.

Thanks for the write. :D

-JH

[James Johnson]

This describes my relationship right now :) i really like this

[kayla garcia]

ya i write it cause thats how i was feeling

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I love the passion and innocent love in this poem.
It truly is very flattering to any reader to see the words
and live the situation.

It does scare me a bit to think of revealing so much without
a secure emotional investment from the guy. Even so,
this rambling has no merits in regards to the way you have
written this poem.

It was quite overwhelming. A flood of emotion. Nice work here!

[kayla garcia]

thanx

[kayla garcia]

Thanx for the critizing cause it helps me in how to write next time

[Michael X]

Nicely formulated poem, this really draws an image of love and devotion,
as well as a desire from eternal trust, its purely romantic and rendered
sentimentally, at the same time, the term fantasy reflects a sense of dreaming
and longing of what could or may never be, you did an awsome job on this.