when i found you.

When our hands intertwine my faults go away.

When your kiss touches my lips.

When you hold me close.

Baby i need you all the time.

Baby when i found you i had gazed eyes.

Baby when i asked you out i paniced.

Baby i didnt think you would say yes.

When you breathe on me when we lay next to each other.

When you tickle my back when we are laying there.

When you kiss my forehead and tell me you love me.

I know you are there.

baby i want to have kids and marry you.

I love you baby.

And there is no one better then you.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

I think it's simple and well said..reminds of my boyfriend..i would suggest that you didn't use baby in every line..and pause more between your sentences and you should check this line again
Baby when i found you i had gazed eyes.
i am not sure about gazed eyes.

[Arthur Stewart]

very simple and elegant poem.

The second last line where you switch the word 'baby' from the beginning to end is very powerful.

Good read.

[R.S. Wilder]

Simple and sweet.

Be careful with your capitalization and punctuations though.

[Taylor H.]

Your a very talented writer

[alesuriko]

I'd like to first point out that several of your "i"'s need capitalization and "paniced" should be spelled "panicked." Also, "didnt" in the seventh line needs an apostrophe.

A very sweet poem. Definitely expresses the love shared between the two in this poem. Intimate and lovely. Well done.

[zappy]

this is very wonderful

[Alicante lullaby]

When i'm going to want to have kids with someone,i'm gonna read him this poem...cuteeee

[Ruth]

Wonderful hon
A dedication that moves
xx

[An owl on the moon]

This is a beautiful reflection of your love story. You share what has been, your feelings today, and your dreams of tomorrow. Wondrous!

[*Always be Me:)*]

cute