The Pressure

it's hard out there. i know.

One Drink,
it can't do you no good,
I mean, hey. You can't even get buzzed.
One smoke.
Inhale all that freedom we offer.
All that " Hakuna Matata" S**t.
You ain't getting any younger.
One Party.
You don't have to drink, no one will notice,
but I'm not saying no one will offer you one.
One Dance.
It's just a dance. Skin to skin,
what could hurt? We're not on fire.
One kiss.
It's not like you haven't before, right?
I mean, who hasn't had a kiss with no strings attached?
One bed.
Oh C'mon, you have to lose it at one point, right?
You have someone cute in your hands,
you can't lose this chance.
One drive.
You need to go home.
You're totally drunk,
but you think you're only buzzed.
One Light.
It's your favorite color, you think.
Red.
and you go after it.
One Car.
It's the one you're in.
I'm sorry.
One Mind.
And it's yours.
and you don't even listen to yourself,
how did you live this long if you can't even listen to yourself?
Can't you hear yourself?
You're saying "Stop! This is stupid!"
One life.
And you took it away.
because you just wanted
ONE good time.

Author's Note

sorry, this one doesn't flow that well.

Reviews

[Scotty White]

The flows great, I like it a lot. It read well, with some power behind it. Great Job.

[StarSandwich]

Flow is absolutely fine! I totally get the poem, xD Its actually like things that happen in every day life situations. Loved it actually. Keep them coming x3

[Helpless]

i disagree, i think the flow on this is fantastic! the whole poem was very well done! :)

[Kestrova]

It flows well enough and there is a rhythm to it, no need to apologize for poetry! I liked reading this; it is hard out there and pressure is something teens experience too much, especially when they're just starting to get their bearings in life. Another great poem, keep it up! :)

[clairvoyantmars]

great wording.. makes us all think... :))