Day 8: Thursday

Its 12:10 according to the clock. George and I get up and go out into the halls. “We are going to catch the killer, by guarding the halls.”  I say “or he’ll catch you.” I hear from behind me. I stifle a scream and turn around. Coming out of the dark was the killer! “You won’t die tonight so go back to your room ok? Beautiful.” I realize it is Dave, my ex-boyfriend.  “Dave?” I ask “So you remember me.” He says, coming up so he is standing face to face with me. “I don’t like hurting you but you hurt me baby. Tonight the boy dies. You will be last, and you will suffer.”

Amelia takes a step back and I run at him. Before I can tackle him he pulls a knife and stabs my shoulder. He hesitates for a second, I take my chances and punch him in the nose. The killer runs when I pull back for a second hit. Then I follow Amelia to the med room. I kick the door in and we go inside. She dresses the wound and puts antibiotics cream on it, after she takes the knife out.

Poor George! I take him to the med room and he kicks the door down before I can pick the lock. I bandage him up and take him to our room. When I get back to the room, we wake everyone up and I say, “I think we should sleep in shifts.”

Amelia just came up with a great idea. She thinks we should sleep in shifts. Just as I am about to tell the others what a great idea it is, Shelby says something.

“That’s a great idea!” I say and smile at Amelia. Then I see George. “Oh my god!” I say out of surprise. “What happened?” there was blood all over his sleeve and chest.

“Oh god.” I say when I look down and see all the blood. “It’s not as bad as it looks.” I add, nobody seemed to believe me though. I was freaking out on the inside, after all it was BAD!”

“Did y’all meet the killer?” I ask “Yeah.” Amelia says. George and Amelia go into the bathroom and I hear water running.

Amelia and I are in the shower. She is helping me wash the wound, and me. Since I am one armed, I need help. When we are done, she helps me get dressed. Then she gets dressed. We come out of the bathroom and I feel better. I am clean, and alive. With that thought I lay down next to Amelia and go to sleep.

While George sleeps sierra and I talk. She is very interested in a medical career so we discuss what to do with George. We decide to wait and hope it doesn’t get infected.

Sleep seems impossible but somehow I manage.

My mind is racing but soon I’m asleep.

Ah Hell! Everyone is asleep. Looks like I’m stuck with first watch. Nothing happens and not one sound comes from the halls so when light comes I am surprised to find a dead body and a new message

14 more

Leaving none

Kissing, killing

One by one

I want to scream when it hits me! He has been raping his victims

Reviews

[Douglas White]

You'd be far better off to stick with just a simple black text, instead of the colored fancy texts. These are not only distracting, by they are difficult to read, and made my eyes ache. I couldn't actually finish it because of the text. If you change this to simple text, send me a message, and I'll read it through.

[Alex Vidmar]

I agree with you, Doug. I had trouble with it too.

[writingurl14]

I need to keep soemthing becuase its how i tell you who is writing,... I am going to drop the color but keep the text. Thansk and as soon as i do that i will tell you

[Douglas White]

You would be better off to separate the characters with simple dialog, and skip the fancy texts. Don't forget, there are a lot of people that have a difficult time reading fancy scripts because of bad vision. As a writer, you shouldn't have to rely on anything but your writing skills to define your characters. Just let the words do the work.

[writingurl14]

thanks... I'll work on that :)

[Silent Wolf]

Oh mah goodness gracious! I love this, and it sounds so interesting! I would love to read more, like oh my goodness! Would you mind notifying me when you have more?

[writingurl14]

Thanks :)
and i will be happy to tell you when i have more. :)

[Silent Wolf]

Yay!!!! :)

[writingurl14]

:) i acutally have a newer version that i am workin on typing...

[Silent Wolf]

Lol alright.

[writingurl14]

:) perfect :)

[Silent Wolf]

Lol yeah. :3

[Alex Vidmar]

Nice. but definitely hard to read. Can you make it all one text or all black without the highlighted text? It's a little distracting Rachel.

[writingurl14]

Alright I'll work on it :) thanks :)

[Alex Vidmar]

you're welcome

[writingurl14]

Do you think it would help more to keep just he color or just the text because i need to keep one

[Alex Vidmar]

The text. Color is difficult to read. If the story was told from multiple people's views, I could see it being helpful to discern thoughts and one character from another, etc. When it's told from the view of one person, it should be, in my own opinion, on color.

[writingurl14]

Each color and text belong to a differnet person... thats why i did it.. and im confused do you want me 2 drop the text or color (srry im blond on the inside)

[Alex Vidmar]

color. (I know. its alright)

[writingurl14]

thanks and good :) :)

[Alex Vidmar]

You're welcome. Would you mind reviewing my story Snow Angels? And let me know which ending you prefer?

[writingurl14]

sure :) b happy to :)

[Alex Vidmar]

thanks. be honest about it when you do.

[writingurl14]

i always am :)

[Michael Stevens]

A very good story; I do agree with the others that using the different texts was a little distracting, but a fine story none-the-less!

[writingurl14]

thanks :) this means a lot to me :)