But I have a boyfriend

Just how I feel sometimes

He makes me laugh 

He makes me smile

Something that is hard to do

But I have a boyfriend

He tells me I’m pretty

But I have a boyfriend

He is my age

But I have a boyfriend

He isn't the jealous type 

But I have a boyfriend

I love him

But I have a boyfriend

Author's Note

Please tell me anything that I need to change

Reviews

[JordanIsaacSmith]

I'm not sure what to think of this one. It's certainly the most original piece I've seen, in the way that it's written. Out of the twelve lines, five of them are the same. Is there significance behind that? Perhaps I'm reading too much into it and it's simply that you were excited that you have a boyfriend?

[writingurl14]

i was trying to show the conflict going on inside myself at the time.... i was showing how i felt about the guy yet i was conflicted because i had a boyfriend

[Audrey Bowers]

I like it. Don't change a thing. There isn't a certain way to write a poem, it's all about what you as the writer thinks is right.

[DogDrawler]

Don't change it! It's so good, it should be a crime! A funny classic that I extremely enjoyed!

[writingurl14]

thanks :) this means a lot to me

[SOUL LESS]

Simple and works. Presents the conflict. People ditch people all the time. Just go with the flow. Cheers!

[writingurl14]

thanks :) glad you like it :)

[Samantha Lynn]

make stanza's. separate the thoughts to ease the pressure on the reader and it will make it easier for them all to grasp all that is thought. :)

[writingurl14]

thanks for the suggestion :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Temptation make dance on dangerous edges. I like the repetition. Sometime we need to hear the words to keep us strong and out if trouble. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[writingurl14]

thanks

[Crazy Cat Man]

simple and cute

[writingurl14]

thanks

[Wolf]

Nothing to change, it's perfect this way! It shows how we feel when we feel attracted to another person when we are taken.

[writingurl14]

thanks :)

[zainul]

Awesome!

[writingurl14]

thanks :)

[zainul]

welcome :)
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[writingurl14]

:)

[zainul]

:)

[Phillitup]

Hmmm, is this true? Yikes, sounds complicated. I love the poem though, subtle yet strong.

[writingurl14]

:)thanks