I cut

This is a poem about how I feel when I cut

I cut

The razor slices my skin

The blood flows down my arm

The pain electrifies

The sensation is wonderful

I carve a heart into my arm

To be there forever

To love me like

A man should love me

Like my ex didn't

Like my parents didn't

But it will

The razor always loves me

So naturally

I cut again

Author's Note

please tell me what you think of the poem... any reviews are going to be read... thanks

Reviews

[Phillitup]

I know life is hard, when you are sad the smallest things can make it SO much worse. Trust me when I say that things get better. Trust me when I say the past is behind you. You don't know me, I don't know you. It's fair to say that the opinion of a stranger is often the most relevant. -Dell

[writingurl14]

thank you so much... these days, thanks to a certain bf, life is much better and I havnt cut in a long time... thanks for your review... what did you think of my poem in of itself?

[Phillitup]

brilliant, as much as I hate to imagine this the feeling is so real in this poem. eloquent as anything. I'm glad to hear that things are getting better, I hope they stay that way! :)

[writingurl14]

:)

[JordanIsaacSmith]

Very good poem, I know a few people that'd be able to relate to this. Good piece of writing and your emotions come through very well. Great piece of work. Nice to hear you're doing better than when you were feeling when you wrote this.

[writingurl14]

thanks... i hope that i can stay doing better...

[Djourrisse Appleby]

This poem gave me goosebumps. Hahaha. Makes the reader feel sad (I did.). This also made me think back about my life.

[writingurl14]

:) its supposed to make you think :)

[Djourrisse Appleby]

yea, i felt it n_n

[writingurl14]

:)

[Dean Kuch®]

I can certainly relate to this one, writingurl14. Left alone and unnoticed in some forgotten corner of your room. Virtually ignored by your family, except when you've done something they consider to be 'bad'. We've all experienced similar feeling of loss and loneliness. I can assure you, though, there is light at the end of the (rather dark) tunnel. I lost my best friend in high school. He also liked to carve and cut on himself. No one, not even me, his best friend, was aware of this proclivity to cut. He always wore long-sleeved shirts, claiming to be susceptible to skin rashes. it wasn't because of any rash that he kept the flesh upon his arms concealed. I wrote a poem about this very topic a while back, dedicated to Don's memory. You might like to read it sometime, should you find you have a spare moment or two.

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/PlasmaSprayer/1009832/

Very thought provoking, poignantly sad write...

[writingurl14]

I am so sorry about your friend, and thanks for the review.

[Frieda P]

It's straightforward and gets right to the point, albeit disturbing. Sorry you have to cut to feel any relief, hopefully your poetry can take it's place one day. Keep purging your thoughts here, it's cathartic.

[writingurl14]

thanks :)

[h d e rushin]

The writers here have accepted me as their family. They will love and do the same
for you. This I swear.

dana

[writingurl14]

thanks :)

[writingurl14]

thanks :)

[Lee]

It's one of those pieces that really gets under your skin - no pun intended..

Truly it's written well, you can feel the pleasure and pain wrapped up in the words.
Yea, And really, this is nicely put together - definitely one of my favorite pieces.
Relatable and Comforting for those who understand these sorts of feelings. Truly, surprisingly refreshingly comforting.

Overall, Nice work, it's an amazing write.

[writingurl14]

thanks soo much!

[zainul]

Many writers in WC loves you.
This is very unfortunate that your parents didn't love you.
You are too young to be worried about love of a man to have a family.
You still have time to grow as a lovely educated personalty.
When you are at the right age and have been empowered by your personality,self dignity
and education you will have a wonderful prince to live ever after happily.
You will eventually realize that a dignified life is better than the cut of razors.
Thanks for sharing.

[writingurl14]

You have no idea how much her parents love her and have done for her. Post submitted by her parents.

[zainul]

I want to learn more.

[writingurl14]

ack! my parents posted that! not me! dont believe a word of that bullshit lie!

[zainul]

It sounds quite weird!
How your parents could post in your account?

[writingurl14]

b/c i forgot to log out!

[zainul]

How often do you speak the truth?

[writingurl14]

always

[zainul]

That's great.
I adore you,dear little friend.

[writingurl14]

thx :)

[zainul]

:)

[Sarah Emily]

"to love me like a man should love me" favorite lines!! Captures the moment effectively, and I can definitely relate. Keep writing.

[writingurl14]

thanks :)

[Sami Khalil]

"I carve a heart into my arm

To be there forever

To love me like

A man should love me."
I like the poem. Those are my favorite lines...:)
.

[writingurl14]

thanks :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[writingurl14]

I always enjoy people reading my work :) and reviewing

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[writingurl14]

:)