CaT CrAzY

                                     

           

I StUmBlE AlOnG, WaYwArDlY

MyWoRdS,WhAtDoEsThEyDeNoTeThAtWaY

MakeS My WhIsKeRs CuRl KnOwInG WhAt ThEy MiGhT SoOn ArRaY

  YaRn UnRaVeL BeRzErKlY, ChOkINg A LiGhTs OuT 

In ThE BaY

      

HeAd RaTtLeS FuRiOuSlY, OcUlUs RoTaTiOn 

ReArWaRdLy FrOm InVaDiNg VeNoM In My DnA

TrAiL In ThE WaKe, FrAiL On TuRf ThAT LaY

LiNkS BiNdInG ThE WrIsT LiKe So In A SpElL, HaVe YoUr DaY

MoNgReL's ChAsM DuNgEoN ImPrIsOn In ThIs

MaYlAy

    LeT Me BrEaKoUt, MuSt HaVe To SeE ThE PrEcIoUs

RaY

BiTtEn InTo CoRe FrOm CaNiNe WaYs

At YoUr CoMmANd, ObEdIeNt StRaYFuR Of HaIr FrAyeD Of TiMe WhEn'S OnE DaY

TiMe HaVe CoMe ThEiR PuRrRty

DoEs YoU KnOw WhAT Is To SuFfeR WhEn YoU

               FoRaY

BlOwN OuT AlMoNd EyEs, WoN't ViSiOn StRaIgHt, PlAGUeS PuPiLs MuRkY GrEy

InTo ThE VaSt DuSk SwAlLoWiNg Me AwAy

LiCk PaWs DiSeASeD Of ViLe CaRcAsS DeCaY

WhO'S ThAt MaStErMiNd, ToP DoG AnD WhY HaVe ThEy To SlAy?

YoUr ViCtIm, ChAsInG LiTtLe ExIsTaNcE I OnCe HaVe InVeIgH

AcId EnClOsUrE CoRnER Me In AlL SiDeS, PeRmIt No PaSsAgEwAy

WhEn CaN It DeSiSt, SiNcE It's OuTrE?

CaN't HaLt WiTh GrIm ReApEr In GuNpLaY

RiP FrOm PaW To PaW SiNcE DiSaRrAy

    ToRmEnT IfLiCtEd By DeRaNgEd DoG, ChOpPeRs FoAmInG PeRfUsLy As EaRs SpIkE Up KnOwInG ThIs 

Is AgLeY 

ClAw DeSpArAtLy, WaNt OuT iN DeLiRiA, I AsSaY A GeTaWaY

InCaPaBlE To PaCiFy WhAt'S CoMiNg DoWn AlLyWaY

WhAt NeXt DoEs EnTeR To MeMoRy, NeVeR AlLaY

MaDLy, InTeNt AbOuT ThE EnDiNg NeAriNg BeInG UnSay

     
SiNkInG MoLaRs DeEpEr, ViCiOuSlY, LeT MySeLf Be

DiSmAy

RoAr In AgOnY, CrEaTuRe'S SpIriT StRiCkEn WiTh GoRy FlAmBe.

MaRk YoUr TeRrItOrY LeTtInG Me GrAsp WhO's AcMe

    

Do EvEr RoWdIlY PeTtInG Is SpAsTiC, AlLeGeDlY In 

WaY YoU DeEm OkAy?

SnIfF ApaRt My FeTcH SoUl In MaYlAy

       EnFoLd InSaNeLy AcTs Of BrUtAlItY BiEnG YoUr

VaLeT

DiSFiGuReD ThOuGhTs RaMpId RePlAy

ChEW YoU Up ThE SoUl TiL It DiSinErGrAtEs AwAy

Ever ScRaTcHiNg At My CoAt Of FlEsH, SlAsHiNg To BoNeS, HaViNg FaLlEn PrEy

TaIl CuT To ShREDs BaDlY, ErE WaS In LiTtEr BoX Of ViTaLiTy,  Did WaG, DiD Freely SwAy

 
                GrOtEsQued HoRroR, Is ThAt WhAt A FelInE 

PoRtRaYs?  

                     

                  

                 

Author's Note

A bit dark then I would normally do, but I like how this came out. Saw a pic while googling for another and this came to mind. If the alot of words are not used in the sentences correctly or the sentence is all correct, it's supposed to be like that, as long as you understand it. Hence the meaning of the poem. Be a bit more considerate and not so abrasive. Thanks. Hope you like this.

Reviews

[Tina Louise UK]

Looks like my brain, all kerfuffled scrambling to be normal, a unique read hun...enjoyed :) x

[BlackRose]

Yes, exactly sometimes, haha. Thank sooo much for reading. Ecstatic you enjoyed it and could read it. :o)

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[Pax]

deeply profound work my friend...and very artistic way of presentation....for me its darker than i thought you say...a crazy cat with a dreadful past....very fine piece...well done

[BlackRose]

Thanks so much! I appreciate those great words. I can be very artistic when it cones to my work as you may have seen from my other works. :o) I had seen the pic above googling for another before I added a few thing to the pic. And thought and it has been said for years dogs alot of the times chase cats. The words referencing the two mixed in with this dark poem, rhyming while I'm at it too worked. :o)

[Layla J Omorose]

i have to be honest too i do like the presenation or the idea of the presentation of the poem but as i was reading it it became tidus to finish. to be honest i got about half way theough before i became annoyed with deciphering each line. but like i said i do like the look it creats. its just the reading that did go with the apperance. maybe if you make it so only a few lines looked smashed together instead of the whole poem it might work better.

[BlackRose]

Right, I see your point coming from yours and some others. It's just a really deep poem and hard to tweak. Easy for me to say since I wrote this. But I will see what I can do in the future. Thanks for liking the other parts though.

[Laura Maidah]

OKay, so I won't lie. I couldn't finish it. I really can't read it. It's like writing your dissertation piece with highlighter. I can't see it! Maybe an edit? THe presentation is just.... very... umm.... aghhh.

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Intriguing. I had much difficulty reading it, but once I worked it all out it was worth it. Fantastic!

[BlackRose]

Thanks so much. Once you read on though, you get what it's all about or how you would perceive it.

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think some of this is quite clever but in this instance, and do not take this the wrong way, I feel the presentation tends to override the subject. It becomes difficult to read and the average person on this site will simply overlook it as too much hard work...I would tone down the effects...But that is merely MY opinion

[BlackRose]

This based in how the how the dog in most cases hates the cat. The crazy dog/human goes after the cat/human and tortures them. The cat/human goes out of it's mind wanting to escape. Or in this case one who is mental in anyway and wants to be normal again, fighting what's in their head.

[Dr. Wood ?]

it is very deep and not a little complicated. I still think it would be easier to follow if the text was easier to read...Maybe change it round just a little less. What I understood of it I thought was very inventive though

[BlackRose]

I did it that way cause this person is supposed to be tortured how ever way you see. So the words are not read right for that reason. But once one reads it they I hope get what it's all about. And thanks for the feedback and do take these into consideration.

[Dr. Wood ?]

I see...It works then. It is always difficult to read an authors interpretation...Good work...As you know, I never get that deep with my stuff...I think it might hurt my head to try....You clearly enjoy writing and that is the most important thing...AND it is wonderful to experiment...Keep em coming

[BlackRose]

That I do enjoy. And like I said above, not something I would normally write or be that deep in this kind of way. I do like to be different and write outside the box sometimes. That's what makes it more interesting one that wants to keep coming back for more. Like your works for instance. I keep coming back to see what new and great works you have. And yes, I will keep them coming. You can count on the for sure. lol. I have one other for now on the way and you know this one a bit. Thanks so much.

[Dr. Wood ?]

thanks for the compliments...We all need a little push

[BlackRose]

Yes, that we do sometimes. And your very welcome. :o)