Stroll through the Wood of Dreams

A Story by Azurel

Hi guys! This is my homework, but my teacher doesn't have time to correct mistakes for me so I hope to receive your feedbacks XD Thank ya!!!

I walked along the path, whose sides were full of wet grass. The sun had not risen yet, but I could see what was on my way. The air was cold and fresh, and there was a slender veil of mist covering the sleeping creatures and whispering to the awaken ones. Sometimes I heard a mysterious sound coming from the innermost structure of the wood - I couldn't define that was the voice song of a fairy or just a howl of a lonely beast...

When I was floating on the highest clouds of my mind, suddenly a thin gleam slipped on my cheek, and then more and more gleams appeared. I slowly turned back and...Alas! It was the first time I had ever felt so touched: The whole world was just like an awaken beauty after a long sleep. Every nook of the wood was being dyed in the most gorgeous gold, and they were pleased to receive it. All the flowers gloomed. Sparkling butterflies danced around me. In a magical moment, the Great Chorus of thousands of unknown birdsongs resounded - they were singing, not tweeting! The sky was high and cerulean, and if anyone had seen that scene, he would have never suspected whether heaven were real or not. The Creator had already decided to give his universe some gifts from the angels: it began to drizzle. Every single drop was a pure soul indeed. They sang and they shone and they danced before melting into Mother Earth, where seeds of life was growing up. A drop dripped on my face. Closing my eyes, I could hear a newborn baby crying. I felt it was smiling at me.

At that time, I completely had no doubt about it anymore.

I was in Fairyland.

© 2013 Azurel

Author's Note

I'm totally bad at writing, so if you guys feel what needs correcting, just comment. Thankkksssss!!!

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Cerulean

Aww, Kawai :D You did pretty good, shimai :P You did, however, use some wrong words and incorrect tenses. Read through it one more time, and try to separate it into paragraphs, but overall well done! Your lovely sister is impressed :)