The Mask of Lies

this doesnt make any sense at all. This randomly came to me as i was eating.

Your secrets hidden in me,
a treasure chest full of lies,
deep behind your mask of disguise,
lies beneath the real you.
No one shall know about us,
or know the reason why.
No questions shall be asked,
but why must I hide?
Once they find out,
it will all end soon.
You will again try to find someone new,
the old battle you once won,
but a feeling of rejection will pull you down,
for you will become my prisoner. 
Your wings useless under my spell,
there is no escaping.
And again you shall endure pain,
your body aching,
bruised and bloody.
Don't try to pretend it won't happen,
stop denying the truth,
for you and I know
that I am the real you

Author's Note

please tell me your honest opinion of this writing. i want to be better, so please review it..

Reviews

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

darling, i found this to be so beautifully written and it came from your soul, i am very happy i read this poem....x0x0x0x00x0

[Julio Cesar Ruiz]

Hmmm...it makes sense to me. I've had a theory for a while now and the more I read the more its seems to be true. Though I know that I could be wrong I would like to test it. And you are a great writing, stop doubting yourself and believe that you can achieve anything. I believe in you so you do the same.

[Nick Almanza]

yea its a good write and yea you were right it doesnt make much sense but that last part about the wings that was about we were texting huh? hmm and this poem has that evil feeling to it yea another great poem hmmm totally=)

[Vox Machina]

You have disguise spelled wrong in the third line, but I'd lose it entirely, mask of disguise is redundent. Try, "deep behind your mask
lies the real you."

Just an idea since you asked for honesty, other than that I like it.