Song

Wrote this as a song.

Over the mountains,
a honey tree glistens, sparkling with color.
The flowers spread by it,
opening their blossoms at the rise of the sun.

A brand new day has begun,
so my flower don't you cry.
I will always stand by you,
no matter how hard things may come by.

The world is full of many things,
more than you can see.
 So open your eyes, my little flower-
and take flight into the world.

Let your dreams take you to places
you've never seen.
And soon the day shall come
when you leave me.

When that day comes, oh my little flower,
like the honey tree blowing in the wind,
I wish you to be free.

Author's Note

Just a really random song I wrote while writing my novel. I was thinking of what you'd sing to a child as a lullaby and I wanted it to have meaning for the moment I was making my character sing it in, so this popped into my head. Wasn't thinking of it to rhyme or have a meter at all. Just a free verse I suppose.

Also entered in a contest. Please give reviews! :)

Reviews

[Natasha]

this was sweet and flowed nicely

i agree with the others below how it has a soothing child-like lullaby to it

[David Scott]

Your writing makes me feel happy... Simply happy. Thank you!

[Archia]

I could acutally really imagine this as a lullaby-type song. It would be all nice and sweet and melodic, just like the poem. And the meaning was really beautiful. It was sad almost, but with that happy wonderful tone. Great poem.

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Very inspiring! It feels like the song was guiging me through life.

[A. L. Allen]

Beautiful. The imagery is absolutely stunning. Great job!

[Dream Hunter]

this is such a beautiful piece of writing. it's a perfect song, especially for a lullaby...

"So open your eyes, my little flower-
and take flight into the world."

so soothing and comforting and pretty. I hope it wins the contest! :D great work!

[The Jay]

A lullaby for children of all ages. Lol. Intricately written.

[Summer D.]

I will try to make this a song of some sorts; maybe I'll sing it for you one day.
Pretty~

[Jasmine Thousand]

This is amazing. I can really see this as a song, and it beautiful. Love it, spectacular work. I love the flow of the piece, like wind...

**highly deserved 100

~*Anastasia Shalroy*~