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A Poem by
ayejodie
Reduced to a small child,
I am needy again.
I become weak and dependant.
Crying at night, so they don't hear,
I pray so hard to God.
In this moment, I am nothing.
In this barren wasteland, I sit.
Tears streaming down my cheeks,
I call for my Mother.
Scream.
I am a lost wreckage,
In a sea of silence.
No adult instincts,
I cannot survive this one.
Feeling more alone than I ever have..
I fall victim to my latest fight.
I cannot go on...
I cannot go on, alone.
I let it consume me, in hopes I will be numb.
You've let me down, you didn't save me..
This little life already doomed,
Because we are.
© 2015 ayejodie
Author's Note
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Reviews
The way that use describe things in your poem is wonderful and beautiful.The poems is a great piece!:)
Posted 9 Years Ago
Hmmmm. How incredibly sad. Being vulnerable and weak, needing a savior when none comes. Very sad indeed.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Hmmmm. How incredibly sad. Being vulnerable and weak, needing a savior when none comes. Very sad indeed.
Wow very descriptive and powerful. Love it!
Posted 9 Years Ago
Wow very descriptive and powerful. Love it!
It's a heartbreaking poem, beautifully written. It's not good at all to be alone but life is very unjust from inmemorial times. I deeply feel the following lines:
"Feeling more alone than I ever have..
I fall victim to my latest fight.
I cannot go on...
I cannot go on, alone..."
- Jesus
Posted 9 Years Ago
It's a heartbreaking poem, beautifully written. It's not good at all to be alone but life is very unjust from inmemorial times. I deeply feel the following lines:
"Feeling more alone than I ever have..
I fall victim to my latest fight.
I cannot go on...
I cannot go on, alone..."
- Jesus
This was very passionate and emotional, yet dark and beautiful. Thank you for sharing this amazing work of art:)
Posted 9 Years Ago
This was very passionate and emotional, yet dark and beautiful. Thank you for sharing this amazing work of art:)
So much emotion in this; so dark and beautiful. I love it.
Posted 9 Years Ago
So much emotion in this; so dark and beautiful. I love it.
I was molested and raped when I was 9 and as I read these words you have penned you have summed all of my fears past, present and future? The job of poetry is that it is suppose to invoke some kind of emotions and that the reader should somehow change after reading. Maybe not this writing per se has changed me because the scars remain but your other works have moved me and made me a better writer. you write way ahead of your age and I hope I am alive to see you in the next 1,3,5,7 years and beyond.
Posted 9 Years Ago
I was molested and raped when I was 9 and as I read these words you have penned you have summed all of my fears past, present and future? The job of poetry is that it is suppose to invoke some kind of emotions and that the reader should somehow change after reading. Maybe not this writing per se has changed me because the scars remain but your other works have moved me and made me a better writer. you write way ahead of your age and I hope I am alive to see you in the next 1,3,5,7 years and beyond.
This poem carries a lot of emotion and sorrow in it
It get's the core of the reader really.
Once again you never disapoint! Its a really good poem!
Posted 9 Years Ago
This poem carries a lot of emotion and sorrow in it
It get's the core of the reader really.
Once again you never disapoint! Its a really good poem!
9 Years Ago
Thank you Lizardo, always such great reviews from you. That means a lot!
9 Years Ago
You're welcome !
Dhia guit
ahh, sad times, Miss. you've expressed yourself pretty good, gets the feeling across well, though there is some ambiguity at the end, hailing from Tallaght I could hazard a guess what you might be referring to, though it doesn't really matter, because the feelings what counts and as said, you've gotten hat across pretty good.
keep shinning
Posted 9 Years Ago
Dhia guit
ahh, sad times, Miss. you've expressed yourself pretty good, gets the feeling across well, though there is some ambiguity at the end, hailing from Tallaght I could hazard a guess what you might be referring to, though it doesn't really matter, because the feelings what counts and as said, you've gotten hat across pretty good.
keep shinning
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Hey i'm Jodie, I'm 23!
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