Inside of Me

Mental Illness

You've almost died one hundred times,

A sickness lies in you.

You've cried to me in misery,

But what was I to do?

You've shown me cuts and bruises,

Your body falls apart.

A life you want to end,

You've said from the start.

Although you've almost died,

I have no sympathy.

But I've some-thing to tell you,

...I'm dying too, you see.

My sickness is invisible,

Its all inside my head.

It hurts me all the same,

I can't get out of bed.

I have cuts and scars you know,

Forever, I feel pain.

I am sick in secret,

It's hidden in my brain.

So I know you are unwell,

Your broken physically.

But I do not care because..

I'm dying too, can't you SEE?

Author's Note

I wrote this poem about a year ago I'd say! I've just tweeked it and thought I'd share! This poem is really about mental illness! Really looking forward to hearing any reviews or feedback! Let me know what you think! Thanks :)

Reviews

[deleted]

Very good portrayal of mental illness!

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

As usual you present a very good poem with good progression and vivid simple imagery. The ending was perfect.

[EJD]

Very well written, in my opinion. Brings light to an area that many people never think about when interacting with others. Well done.

[Jennesis]

Some of the most painful things in our lives are unseen. People don't get credit for the pain inside their heads. It's easy to just get attention for the broken arm...nice job

[Suvada]

All I can say is wow it was just beautiful:)

[ayejodie]

Thank you! :)

[keeanaaaa]

Another great poem. I really like your style. You know how to make your reader feel like it is themselves that's actually the writer. You en capture your readers and I love it, keep it up :)

[ayejodie]

Thank you so much!

[DoormanDan]

This is a creative and dark poem you've written. On top of that, it's quite original as well, which successfully makes it stand out even more. I really like this piece! :)

[mias]

I really enjoyed reading this poem, even without a mental illness we sometimes tend to make ourself crazy with our own thoughts, Thanks for sharing! :)

[ayejodie]

Thank you Dalia!

[Lizardo]

This really cause something in my stomach, one great poem and I could feel it.
this is one grat poem, I like how you ended it.
Great poem

[ayejodie]

Thank you so much! :)