The Big Picture

life as it is.

I'm still empty inside

But I'm still glad I lied

I need someone to perfect me

But I need to stay free

Don't want to get attatched because I don't want to break

Love is a lot like the apple and the snake

You can take a bite

But life won't go right

Soon enough you will find yourself

Stuck in a room with nothing but memories on a shelf

You can try to keep on keeping on

But it'll be hard when everything inside of you is gone

You must be stupid, you must lack common sense

Doing all you can just to live in the past tense

You'll spend time to figure what it's all about

Only to find your perspective was inside out

 

And after a dozen fake ones, you’ll finally smile

You’re free, you left your emotions outside in a pile

You will be happy, enjoying the fresh air

When suddenly you’ll see someone somewhere

Your mind and your heart will begin to reminisce

The bad and the good and I can’t stand this

It’s a cycle - it never ends, never bends

It never mends, it just blends

Experiences and lessons make a mixture

And that’s when you’ll finally see the big picture

Author's Note

Comments? Opinions? Advice? Much appreciated. :)

Reviews

[brenda]

i know this feeling too well me too i hate liking someone well its nice cause you go in the clouds but like when you dont like tht person you feel so free and yeah about the apple and the smake and your whole opinion about it agree wit you on tht one life just doesnt go right and oh my godness i love this poem its really good and i can relate to it !

[brenda]

i still think its great ! especially on how you end the poem it is an awesome poem now completed !:)

[Kayla K]

You definitely got the feeling across, in a well-written way, too.

The second part of it is awesome. Not many see the big picture nowadays, but you definitely captured it in this.

[Helpless]

how very sad.... i know how you feel though.... great work!

[C. Rose]

Reads well, like the rhyme gives it a nice flow. The sentiment is one we can all relate to and sometimes its good to have poetry that isn't about the perfect ending...what is that really anyways?

"Love is like the apple and the snake
You can take a bite
But life simply won't go right"

Great string in my opinion. ~ Rose

[ImagineItAll]

This was very, very powerful for such a short poem. You packed a lot of emotion and understanding into very few words.

[∂αʌ<..]

simple...short...but...
wow,the load you put into it...the sadness..anger-a little tiny bit! frustration yet happiness-mixing emotions...wonderful...i think this is a great write...
and it drooooooooops into my favourite list!^.^

annnnnd..adding my little +comment for having finished this:(lol)
i like this bit- "It’s a cycle - it never ends, never bends
It never mends, it just blends
Experiences and lessons make a mixture
And that’s when you’ll finally see the big picture"

well, what do i say more now---PERFECT!

[WynterPhoenix]

I love the lines of "I'm still empty inside, but I'm glad I lied." I think this one is great and I love the rhyme scheme you have going on. Kudos to you, my friend.

[Suzy Q]

Yeah, you said it's unfinished. It kinda sounds unfinished. Anyways, that's a really really good start. And I CANNOT WAIT to read the rest of it (: