The Big Picture

life as it is.

I'm still empty inside

But I'm still glad I lied

I need someone to perfect me

But I need to stay free

Don't want to get attatched because I don't want to break

Love is a lot like the apple and the snake

You can take a bite

But life won't go right

Soon enough you will find yourself

Stuck in a room with nothing but memories on a shelf

You can try to keep on keeping on

But it'll be hard when everything inside of you is gone

You must be stupid, you must lack common sense

Doing all you can just to live in the past tense

You'll spend time to figure what it's all about

Only to find your perspective was inside out

 

And after a dozen fake ones, you’ll finally smile

You’re free, you left your emotions outside in a pile

You will be happy, enjoying the fresh air

When suddenly you’ll see someone somewhere

Your mind and your heart will begin to reminisce

The bad and the good and I can’t stand this

It’s a cycle - it never ends, never bends

It never mends, it just blends

Experiences and lessons make a mixture

And that’s when you’ll finally see the big picture

Author's Note

Comments? Opinions? Advice? Much appreciated. :)

Reviews

[brenda]

i know this feeling too well me too i hate liking someone well its nice cause you go in the clouds but like when you dont like tht person you feel so free and yeah about the apple and the smake and your whole opinion about it agree wit you on tht one life just doesnt go right and oh my godness i love this poem its really good and i can relate to it !

[trainwreck]

This was pretty great. You approached the whole idea with taste and led us through the stages very well. I love that you had a loose structure and didn't try to fit this work into such a tight box that the theme would be lost. Excellent job.

[Sami Khalil]

Stuck in a room with nothing but memories on a shelf...
Well penned...

[Valentine]

A poem telling the true facts of most young peoples lives as they wander through to adulthood looking for thatr special someone..A neat way of expressing that..Vaalentine

[Coyote Poetry]

Love can be many things. I lost a lot more then I won. I wouldn't trade one memory away. Today I have many rewards for a life seeking love. I had days where the beer and whiskey was my only friend. I raised up and found the right road.
"It’s a cycle - it never ends, never bends
It never mends, it just blends"
If you don't join the dance. You won't know any pleasure. Thank you for a poem that open the door to a big discussion. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[OT]

you certainly know your way around a couplet rhyme - I like the beat of it - the content - the heart can be a fickle thing and stores the emotions the brain neglects - I like the resolve - of finally seeing the big picture - nice!

[A little tipsy]

motions of ones heart can play on ones mind as you well stated in your wonderful poem. Well done poet you've coverd it all in one great write. I'm impressed. Title was well chosen for this poem

[J.Carnevale]

oh my gosh that was amazing!!!!!!!!!!! best ive ever read!!!! your sooooo amazing!!!! i can really connect thank you!

[Ruth]

Almost a test like experience..this is excellent love..I like it a lot :)
Perfectly written, an immensely moving poem!
xx

[Suzy Q]

Ugh, yes. Finally finished. Me Gusta even more now.

[ImagineItAll]

Ha, nice! The big picture...and a viscous cycle...great, great, great way to end it.