Ugly on the Inside

growing up

I’m an empty little boy

Who is deprived of joy

So I’ll do what I can

To become a man

I learned how to tie a tie

But I still wonder why

Being a man doesn’t come so easily

You can’t hide behind a generic happy

If you look deep into my eyes

You’ll see the tale of my demise

I’m ugly on the inside

She just left and I just died

I fucked lots of different girls but I still felt alone

Day by day, my morals sunk like stone

I tried to drink my problems away

I tried hard but they’d just stay

What was left of my humanity

Inspired me to switch my mentality

So I would do all I can

To become a man

One day a girl who’s ugly on the inside

Will learn that society lied

She’ll fall in love with the ugly in me

And the man I’ve become will take the responsibility

To ensure that both of our hearts beat beautifully

Author's Note

Comments? Opinions? Much appreciated.

Reviews

[Suzy Q]

It comes with growing up... All of it. Especially thinking negatively about yourself. You're not a bad person inside, no one is. No one means to change most of the time. Experiences change you. People do. But you have to hold your head up high, and know that you are who you are. And that no matter what you're going to be okay. So who cares if you lost one girl? There's many fish in the sea, just make sure you find an angel fish instead of a angler fish. Hakuna matata.

[blakjassy]

I think this is a good message as the story moves from self hating to acceptance and taking responsibility...

my only feedback would be that even though there is only one line that would apply...I fucked lots of different girls but I still felt alone... some may say that a mature rating would be appropriate... doesn't offend me at all though

[Que]

Fantastic poem: I suppose it reflects what pretty much everybody goes through, especially in their teenage years - feeling ugly inside is something that comes quite easily, unfortunately.
You wrapped it up quite nicely, letting there be hope for the future.
Favourite lines:
"If you look deep into my eyes
You’ll see the tale of my demise
I’m ugly on the inside
She just left and I just died".
Lovely poem, glad I read it :)
Cheers and have a good day!

[Coyote Poetry]

I understand this poem. Sometime when we become dirty with life. Good to find people in the same boat. Misery like and need company. I like how you gave the story in this poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[brenda]

this is really sweet and i know a guy well he is the class president and he thinks he has a big nose but oh well this was a really good poem

[J.A.Bentley]

The redemptive tale sir. Very well. The beginning was rough for me just due to the low and sunken picture of ugliness of the soul, but in the end you manned up and desired to be redeemed.

[MaggieSummers]

love all of it, but especially love the last 5 lines... beautiful...

[OT]

ahh very nice - the rhyming couplets well executed here I thought - I like the resolve towards the end - from the ugly inside - to being appreciated/loved for that - beyond the physical to the core - nice!