Breathless

Breaking old habits too late, growing a sack and telling someone how you feel - too late, points of views.

A lesson life has taught me

Is to always keep my heart completely empty

Feelings are felt by the weak

And someone to care for isn't someone to seek

Secrets are kept for a reason

And to betray them is treason

You came along and taught me to express

My thoughts and feelings, you said to just confess

So I did and in a drunken state of mind

I let you see a part of me you weren't supposed to find

I revealed the way I felt about you

A pound of raw emotion; what I said was true

Alcohol used to control me it was what I was all about

Then you lead me down a different route

I claimed my freedom

And crowned myself king, the world is my kingdom

My new point of view came two days too late

And so I missed out on my lucky chance my grip on fate

Sometimes the past is too hard to forget

I grew up the hard way, I was terrified of regret

Now I'm faced with a morose situation

I'm overcome with a numbing sensation

I hear a profound silence as I realize

That I just lost the most beautiful prize

I'm left with these could-have-been memories

But I'm supposed to watch them fly away with the breeze

I fell in love with your perfect smile

But the language I speak is that of denial

I'm looking forward to the month of December

I hope I'll freeze, maybe I won't remember

Sometimes I still think it's best to be emotionless

To march through the fields of life completely painless

But when I watched you leave, you left me breathless...

Author's Note

Opinions? Comments? Much appreciated.

Reviews

[∂αʌ<..]

I'm looking forward to the month of December
I hope I'll freeze, maybe I won't remembe
Sometimes I still think it's best to be emotionless
To march through the fields of life completely painless
But when I watched you leave, you left me breathless...

this...makes me breahtless!
exquisite!^.^

[trainwreck]

This was amazing. There's nothing harder than changing, and losing the person you changed for. Great job!

[Jesse Jacques]

good rhymes and it has sort of a rhythm to it. very nice.

[Que]

Beautiful. You portrayed emotions perfectly, and with the ending, you left ME breathless.
Great job, I absolutely loved the poem.
Added it to my library! :)
Cheers.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Yes life doe's teach us these things and you have place it in such a great comand with these words it makes it a...............................Excelent write.

[White Ink]

Reading this for the third time... and it still amazes me!!

[J.A.Bentley]

The rhythm was spot on, i felt as if given a mic I could rap the lines while conveying the raw emotions behind it. Powerful sir.

[Raven Lightner]

I...
am speechless.
Beautiful. That's all I can think of: beautiful.

[Suzy Q]

Awesome. Just awesome.
Takes a lot to leave me speechless...