All of My

I waste all of my time trying

I waste all of my energy crying

I waste all of myself caring

yet nobody seems to be sparing.

I don't want to be this way anymore

what do i need to waste my everything for?
Sometimes I wish I didn't have a heart

then it would be easier to fall apart.

Sometimes I feel broken 

and you don't have a clue.

I stand here frozen

not knowing what to do.

I lay here speechless

with tears in my eyes

and a hole in my heart

cuz I didn't know we said goodbye.

I spend all of my time hoping

I spend all of my energy coping

I spend all of myself trying

yet nobody seems to know I'm dying.

I can't take this much longer

thought things like this were supposed to make me stronger

don't know how much more I can take

cuz every time I smile is fake.

And when i feel like crying

its cuz i don't know how to smile.

Nothing can make me laugh,

haven't done that im a while.

Can't put myself together,

I've been broken for so long.

I want to be happy again,

but it all feels so wrong.

It just doesn't feel fair

I'm wasting my everything for you not to care.

You go about your life that's fine

but stay the hell out of mine.

It's impossible for me to hate you

even after all you put me through

I know you'll never care about me

I've opened my eyes and it hurts to see.

So i guess this it it, the end of you and I

any friendship we ever had can no longer exist.

It's time for me to abandon ship

and I know I need to cease to persist.

From so close to so far apart

I guess we've come full circle now.

You'll forget about me and I'll move on

I'll be alright, though I don't know when or how. 

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

very honest and speaks of true feelings of the speaker... it moves with the speaker's heartbreaking difficulties in life.... loved the concept and the way it catches the reader's mind... very well thought out piece.... provokes deep thoughts... very good flow in the whole piece....full ratings!!!

[Anastasia Rae]

Thank you so much!

[Tex]

Loved Loved Loved this.

let me tell you just a few reasons why. this first passage below is so true so honest it just comes through.

I lay here speechless
with tears in my eyes
and a hole in my heart
cuz I didn't know we said goodbye.

Again in this passage below, it is so authentic every reader can relate... wonderful.

don't know how much more I can take
cuz every time I smile is fake.

I love how this piece moves to acceptance and the possibility of moving on. We don't know if the person in this pain will move on but you give us the hope that they have turned to corner and will do it in this ending below.

So i guess this it it, the end of you and I
any friendship we ever had can no longer exist.
It's time for me to abandon ship
and I know I need to cease to persist.
From so close to so far apart
I guess we've come full circle now.
You'll forget about me and I'll move on
I'll be alright, though I don't know when or how.

ok now for the critique... it looks like you write from emotion (as I do) I see that as a good thing, however the problem is that we have to go fast as we are feeling the emotions and don't want them to pass before getting them down. This style requires a much more stringent prof read. That said the result is a very honest and authentic write. so readers love it. check the following two fixes im = in? and it it, = is it,? Not a big deal but it will irritate readers and they not not get the full impact of your write.

haven't done that im a while.

So i guess this it it, the end of you and I

btw if you don't write from emotions then you are a very good fake (not a bad thing) AND those mistakes would most likely indicate mild dyslexia. (I have dyslexia so I am constantly having to fix that kind of stuff)

A wonderful piece... the flow is great the emotions are honest, your audience will relate to it. Does it get any better than that?

[Tex]

might have been good if I proof read that review ^^^ oh well you get the idea. :-) keep up the good work!

[Anastasia Rae]

thank you so much! I really appreciate all your feedback. I should have done a better job with the editing though :/ But thank you for taking the time to read and comment I really do appreciate it!

[Tex]

As I said it is a common issue with the way you and I write... I often have to go back after I post and "fix" stuff. No Issues there... a very good work. Please do check out some of my stuff and review... You are just the type of writer who's opinion I value the most. Thanks