Chapter 1

The first chapter. I will edit it soon :)

  Brent hasn't called me today, which I find weird. He normally always calls me at precisely nine o'clock. It is nine thirteen, according to the clock on my computer screen. And he hasn't called.

  I am on my MSN account, browsing through my contacts. No one is online which I also find strange because when I am online at this time normally everyone is on.

  After staring at my MSN for about two minutes, I go on iTunes and browse through my extremely long music library.

  I find Basket Case by Green Day, press play, then throw my head back and stare at my phone. It starts ringing and I leap over to it and press the talk button.

  "Hello?" I ask. Please be Brent, please be Brent, please be..

  "What's up Venus?" I hear a voice say which is not Brent's. It is Kim, my best friend ever since the sandbox. 

  I sigh, almost feeling disappointed. "Hey, Kim", I say, in a monotone sounding voice.

  "Someone is happy to hear my voice", she says, being sarcastic. "So, I kind of have to tell you something."

  I pause the music and ask, "what is it?"

  Kim hesitates, which is very un-Kim like. What happened?

  "I'm pregnant", she says slowly. 

  I nearly choke on..well, I nearly choke on spit. "Seriously?" I ask her. "Oh my God, who is the Dad? Are you gonna keep it? Who else knows? What is going to happ-."

  "Venus!!" Kim interrupts with a loud yell. I fall silent.

  Kim takes a long breathe in and says slowly, "Brent is the father."

  Time feels like it stopped. No. No! This has to be a joke. This is a giant nightmare. I will wake up and smile and go to school and make out with Brent in the hallways and laugh with Kim. 

  "What do you mean?" I ask, in a small timid voice. 

  She sighs and then chuckles. "Brent and I are dating now, Venus", she tells me. "We can't be friends."

  The world crashes down. I feel my eyes become wet and my hand grip around the phone. 

  "Oh", I say softly. "W-we can still be friends! I-i just becau-."

  "No, Venus", Kim interrupts me, again. "We can't be friends."

  Then I hear the phone click, and her words echo in my ears.

  Well, screw them! I can find way better friends! Yeah, I can have a million of friends!! I can be the most popular girl at school.

  Who needs them?

  I slam the phone down on the receiver and browse my iTunes library until I find a song that is perfect for this certain occasion; Becky by Be Your Own Pet.

  I press play and sing along with Jemina Pearl:

  "BFF and you're such a good friend

  but I knew it couldn't last 'til summer's end

  you signed my yearbook and that was pretty rad

  but now I'm getting sick of you and it's just too bad

  I heard you talked a lot of s**t about me

  to your new best friend 

  It doesn't matter anyways

  'cause I've found a brand new friend, okay

  me and her we'll kick your a*s 

  we'll wait with knives after class."

  

Author's Note

I will edit it later. Ignore the bad spelling and grammar.

Reviews

[Emunah June.]

Thats not right.

Thats not right at all!!!

Poor Venus! Brent should have at least had the dignity to break up with her before knocking Kim up.

[Vanessa Rico]

Wow! I have been there and know exactly what Venus is feeling! Poor girl to have her world crashed down by a supposed bestfriend that got pregnant by the boy she liked! This kept me interested and I am moving on to chapter 2! This was great!!

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well with this chapter. I like the use of music to express emotion and feeling. A hard few minute on the computer. A lot of pain was learn and now Venus isn't content. A strong ending to a excellent chapter.
Coyote

[Short.Nerd]

I like it:)

[.Lost Soul.]

that was good but i guess it kind of like, jumps out at you and it's like so all of a sudden.. It kind of caught me off guard. Overall very good can't wait to see what happens next :)

[A.E. Surdam]

Keeps me reading. I love it so far. Pretty good. Now I am curious as to what happens next.

[Suzy Q]

Really good for your first chapter.
One thing: She's on her cell phone, but then she slams the phone on the reciever out of anger... There's something wrong there I think...
But overall, really good :)

[SOUL LESS]

Quite enough to shock the reader. It's okay for a beginning but doesn't seem to have the potential for a book. If you make it work out into anything more than a PG Rated teenage rant. I'll read and review it XD

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this is a good start. I want to smack Kim in the face. She is a dumb person and she needs to get beaten for it. I would punch her in the stomach. Anyway I liked it. Thanks for sharing. :)