Perfect mess.
A Poem by
Naomi Roseღ
I wanna run inside
my grave and die.
I want to make it
end.
I don't want to see
their faces,
looking at me with
hatred with every
step I take.
I want to lay down
in the bottom of the
sea.
I want to drown
in nothing and
try to forget about
everything you said.
But then I will
wake up.
And I will have
to remember
everything f*****g
moment
p e r f e c t l y.
© 2011 Naomi Roseღ
Author's Note
I wrote this last year. I found it in my notebook.
Reviews
love the picture, and the title... this is strong, a lot of feeling in this released, awesome write
Posted 13 Years Ago
I like this....filled with honesty...In the last stanza...everything f*****g moment ( was it meant to be that or every f*****g moment)...I got confused....but exceptional work.
Posted 13 Years Ago
I like this....filled with honesty...In the last stanza...everything fucking moment ( was it meant to be that or every fucking moment)...I got confused....but exceptional work.
Life is fair. We must awake and face life again. I like the purpose of this poem. It was hard and to the point. A excellent ending to a outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote
Posted 13 Years Ago
Life is fair. We must awake and face life again. I like the purpose of this poem. It was hard and to the point. A excellent ending to a outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote
You show a lot of courage in this poem...
not running away form those things that hurt.
Posted 13 Years Ago
You show a lot of courage in this poem...
not running away form those things that hurt.
It could use a little work but it has potential. I think everyone has felt this way before. Keep it up.
Posted 13 Years Ago
It could use a little work but it has potential. I think everyone has felt this way before. Keep it up.
This is great. I love it, I have felt this way before
Posted 13 Years Ago
This is great. I love it, I have felt this way before
Quite diabolical, but pleasant to my eyes and mind. Seems like you were very hurt at the time; you did a great job portraying it.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Quite diabolical, but pleasant to my eyes and mind. Seems like you were very hurt at the time; you did a great job portraying it.
Really good poem, we have to face so many unpleasant things in life and there is no escape. Beautifully put.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Really good poem, we have to face so many unpleasant things in life and there is no escape. Beautifully put.
Well written, but hard to read. I know the feeling, where you just want to forget, relax into nothingness. I'm impressed though, the way you express your self is generally simplistic in style/syntax, but your stuff hits hard. Its very real. Admirable.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Well written, but hard to read. I know the feeling, where you just want to forget, relax into nothingness. I'm impressed though, the way you express your self is generally simplistic in style/syntax, but your stuff hits hard. Its very real. Admirable.
It's really good, really deep. You're in touch with your emotions in this peice. I loved it.
Posted 13 Years Ago
It's really good, really deep. You're in touch with your emotions in this peice. I loved it.
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