the darkness

i sit alone,

and watch the darkness fill the air outside my window,

my nightmare begins,

im crying,

screaming,

and my heart keeps bleeding,

as the darkness threatens to swallow me whole,

and capture my soul,

i linger in the halls,

as the dark monsters in the shadows call my name,

let me keep my happiness let me live in peace,

and keep the darkness away,

let it haunt me no longer,

let me bleed no longer,

let the shadows of those dark monsters no longer haunt me,

save me from this nightmare,

it has taken place of all my dreams,

crazy as it seems,

the darkness still haunts me,

and you are what i need,

save me please

Author's Note

i wrote this because things seem nad somtimes but there is always somone there to save us this is also inspiration for my group enjoy

Reviews

[thedaydreamer]

nice one. Longing to get rid of the darkness, the writer seeks way out of the shadows to let the light pave into her dreams.

I think you could have emphasized more on what kind of darkness you are catering to. And also try getting rid of the SMS lingo. (im)

Darkness doesn't exist. It is just the absence of light, that makes us feel so.
Happy writing.

:)

[KatiePie]

This really is a beautiful piece.
A work of art at it's finest ^-^
-Cathrine

[princess]

scare but very nice!

[Deeply Daisy]

Really like this poem; wise beyond your years for sure. Really great use of rhythm and pace and like you say, a ray of hope at the end. Lovely. x

[♥LOVE♥]

great poem

[princess]

good poem and the music is a nice touch

[GrownUpTime]

i like it, no sugestions=)

[♥(heatherawesome..]

this is awesome and i love it awesome keeeeeeeepppppppppp up the awesome work k.k.

[Ashley.M.E]

this is good