Flaws

The cool breeze breathes life into the summer night.

The fireflies dance, flaunting their radiant light.

As I sit alone, I'm drawn to pause.

The pure and innocent beauty, exposing my flaws.

The dewdrops sparkle as they show.

Flowers don't need told to grow.

The stars above, brightly shining.

They rise to glory, without even trying.

Tree branches extend with confident might.

Birds joyously leap, ready to take flight.

And I sit alone with a stupefied pause.

The pure and simple beauty, exposing my flaws.

The remembrance of being one in the same.

Young and innocent, nothing to lose, but all to gain.

Growing older seemed like a dream.

But it is only a nightmare, filled with pain.

And still I sit with somber pause.

The pure and innocent beauty, exposing my flaws.

 

Reviews

[Death Girl]

Beautifully written and everyone has flaws which is what makes this even better

[Simon Welsh]

You paint a beautiful yet saddening image. Nicely done.

[chaotic katie]

Thank you i'm glad you enjoyed

[Deuces]

So very true. I loved this piece, as I often wonder the same... I remember as a kid, anticipating adulthood, but these lines hit home right here:
Growing older seemed like a dream.
But it is only a nightmare, filled with pain.

Pure and innocent beauty is how we start. The flaws are what we grow into. Awesome piece.

[chaotic katie]

Thank you so much for the feedback, I really appreciate it

[Kent Clark]

this is absolutely beautiful, baby. I love it.

[chaotic katie]

thank you darling

[SonOfPlunder]

Beautiful..beautiful imagery, excellent flow. Very nice Katie

[chaotic katie]

Thank you so much for the feedback, its much appriciated

[SonOfPlunder]

Anytime! :)

[Justin]

So many great lines. It paints a beautiful picture and it flows together perfectly

[chaotic katie]

Thank you so much for the feedback, i'm glad you enjoyed