Solitude

This stupid girl,

Is learning now,

congratulations,

take a bow,

you drove me to darkness,

but now I know how,

how it hurts to be betrayed,

over and over again,

I’m not going to replay,

This game is not meant for me,

These knives in my back are paralyzing,

But through this pain I see,

Solitude is the best path,

For the scarred heart in me.

Author's Note

it may not be the best, but I write to vent. Feedback appreciated!

Reviews

[ron]

I have a few knives in my back to so I can relate to all of it. Very well writen and said.

[beyondpen]

You gave an amazing rhythm to the poem, one of the best rhythms I have felt in the poems on WC :)
You may only be venting it out but hey! you gave us a very nice poem to read. Thank you for that :)

[chaotic katie]

Anytime! thanks so much for the feedback!

[beyondpen]

You are welcome dear :)

[Death Girl]

OMFG! please don't feel like that. I really do like this piece. very well written in my opinon. have I betrayed you in anyway?

[chaotic katie]

No! you are one of the three people here for me. Love yah sis

[s y e]

this is really good. sometimes the poetry that comes from within you and makes a powerful punch is the best.

~ Noodle.

[Lexi Villanueva]

I love it very much.-100 I have to say

[Luke Rawlings]

A good use of poetry to vent, but the structure is the same as two others I have read of yours. A variation in structure might make for a new thing, as well as better venting.

[Simon Welsh]

I love it! Sometimes, solitude sometimes is.

[chaotic katie]

thank you so much for the feedback!

[B-poet]

A very unique and eloquent poem. The soundness of your diction is what truly makes your poem a special write in its own right. Great work and pen on. :)

[chaotic katie]

thank you!

[unbrakable fragile gir..]

it was a very nice poem it's got a way of seeing it in your head and feeling the emotions wonderful job