Solitude

This stupid girl,

Is learning now,

congratulations,

take a bow,

you drove me to darkness,

but now I know how,

how it hurts to be betrayed,

over and over again,

I’m not going to replay,

This game is not meant for me,

These knives in my back are paralyzing,

But through this pain I see,

Solitude is the best path,

For the scarred heart in me.

Author's Note

it may not be the best, but I write to vent. Feedback appreciated!

Reviews

[SOUL LESS]

Giving up and running away from life is cowardice, not strength.

[chaotic katie]

Very true that's why I wrote this to sort of rise up and say "yeah i'm hurt but I don't need these people in my life" and walk away. thanks for the feedback!

[SOUL LESS]

Solitude is the best path,
For the scarred heart in me.

This would seem to suggest that u were giving up completely.

[chaotic katie]

yeah, i was sort of between anger and depression when I wrote this.

[SOUL LESS]

Well, hope you're great now :)

[chaotic katie]

I am! thanks for the feedback!

[Anubis]

This is great, you'd make a damn good songwriter. I could imagine this as a set of lyrics in a beautiful song

[chaotic katie]

thanks, i'll work on it!

[Horizons]

Well structured write, i liked this poem. It's a capturing power of sentiments. Flow is great.

[chaotic katie]

Thanks :) I appreciate the feedback

[Antoñyo]

Whoa...in my humble opinion this has flashes of brilliance.
Captured emotion from many, yet all in one...I can even say I agree to the premise.

signed, a new fan

[Dean Kuch®]

This is actually very good, chaotic. Full of untethered, raw emotion and vehement, yet touching, anger...you wear your heart on your proverbial sleeve with this scathing offering.

Venting is good, and doing it through our writing is a fantastic way to drag those inner demons lurking in the dark corners of our minds, and get them out, onto the written page, and expose them for the vile, wicked feelings that they are. That's never a bad thing...

[chaotic katie]

Thanks for the feedback

[Karl Woof Junior]

its a poets job to be hard on yourself, this art takes time before you are truly happy with your work. its your latest so its your best metaphorically its nothing bold but if you re work it and give the reader a different angle of this feeling like a humming bird net or something refreshing and give whoever or whatever your taking about a word your really onto something here, keep at it!

[Ruhoun Q. Geins]

Backstabbers exist so we could learn from them and backstabb others. Is what I think. We do unto others what they have done to us.

[soliloquy]

I can definitely relate to the betrayal part of this. Cant we all? It hurts and you capture those feelings well.

[chaotic katie]

thanks so much for the feedback

[costa siwale]

Wow! I love your wrathful imagery, just beautiful

[chaotic katie]

thank you for the feedback

[Vile]

This right here is pure, raw emotion. It seethes out of the page. Well done. :D

[Rob Santana]

Good vent with strong words. Life can be a stressful experience, I've been there.