Ashes and Coffee

Ashes and Coffee

A Poem by 7ofspades

I spilled ashes into your outreached palms
As you stooped gently to catch them
you did not act surprised
It was like knocking over a forgotten cup of coffee
left carelessly on the counter
too stale to drink
but the scent still lingered 

I noticed your hands were smooth and hesitant
But gnarled from your past
And as I continued to stare at their complexity,
the longer I inhaled air
the faster the ashes flowed from my skin 
and into your hands

Until inevitably a small pile
formed neatly rested upon your palms
Too late to retrieve into my own
So we walked hand in hand, 
With you carrying my ashes in the other
Until I reached my terminal 
To which we parted ways, with you still carrying my ashes in your hand

© 2015 7ofspades


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This is definitely an intriguing write. An odd mix of metaphors that seem to work well together.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This poem kind of feels like love and death all in one. I really like the way you were gentle with it though and how these two themes seemed completely intertwined. I also loved these last two lines -

"Until I reached my terminal
To which we parted ways, with you still carrying my ashes in your hand".

Beautiful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


7ofspades

9 Years Ago

thanks for your comments! this was something i dug up from a previous journal entry. glad you liked .. read more
Lovely. I feel as if you engaged all of the senses in this poem. Looking forward to reading more from you.

Posted 9 Years Ago


7ofspades

9 Years Ago

thank you! i appreciate your feedback, i didn't intentionally try to incorporate sensory aspects in.. read more

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7ofspades
7ofspades

New York, NY



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