sacrament of endeavor

I will not come peacefully, If you try to preach to me your superiority, the glory of a nation you defend so deceitedly. Don't speak to me, I'm not trying to convince you or make amends to you, not apologizing for the words that I curse your descent be immersed in what's worse with poverty and dirt a nail in the eye of every adversary you mistake your strength but it's only weakness you see, it's not very hard for me to dismiss you and get into what your missing I'm doing what your pen should do, reminiscing the truth. I'm yelling I'm screaming I hear in my heart what is wrong with thoughts that dwell in the back of the minds of the lost who are guiding us. Without fail you claim to succeed to stars where success can be bought and is no longer earned I'm getting concerned with the lack of motivation of recognition of the fact at hand this land is perversed but nobody seems to want to stand. Nobody seizes the reigns to control themselves and bite back the animosity when neighbors speak so hostily it's possibly more costly to find a remedy to a problem your creating debating the toils of debt when it was all on your chest this was what was next for the people who were vexed by all the blank checks how easily we regress when were supposed to be the best....this is what the world should get of it's chest.....If it were a little lighter it would be a little brighter for all of us. Think about how much weight your adding to the world then you could be thinking about how much weight you can pull for the world...

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This is something that needs to be performed to ge the actual intensity. You introduce some interesting concepts throughout--particularly towards the middle and end. Your rhyming becomes fairly intense toward the middle, which meets with the highest intense point of the piece...then slows as you make your most personal points to the end.
I won't comment on the topic but I think you have expressed yourself well.