Airlift ruins

mastery of flight suspended in weightlessness, aboard the steel-winged contraption flying through the curtained sheet delivering the scripted performance with clayed smiles and molded gestures beverage cart in hand, moistened toilette in another

caked on rouge/ lathered on lipstick/ forced in unwilling bobby pins

the reused, recycled air circulating through the blue-gray, red splotched stage, caging even confinement

the fourteen-hour play begins, the locked in audience hesitantly complies, choice ripped heartlessly out of their hands, thought surrendered to hierarchical order, to the solemn totem pole waiting in the midst behind clicked in and buckled plastic

making a prisoner even out of imprisonment, shackling her with chains that rattle with a breathless, deathly wheezing

imprisonment: the red-dressed vixen sporting dangerous black heels, known for luring helpless victims like flies befriends the caged confinement, barred behind a steel circular trap

tilted, always slightly tilted/ the perfect pair of pantyhose, not even nurturing a rip/ solid-colored pumps matching the mundane solid-colored uniform with a spark of stripe

act II finishes with a predictable surmise, climaxing to the heightened plot, peaking the pyramid, following the steep ascent to the seat of pleasure

pleasure: not defined as the normative discourse of literary theorists, but the aesthetic beauty found in the utmost useless, the opposition of Freytag's summit

the anxious twinge starts to nerve the play-goers in a fidgety, tense dance shifting from one side to the other unaware of the imaginary, stagnated melody

no intermissions/ over-priced admission/ the longest wait to the bathroom

the called-in attention, announced over the raspy intercom, fuzzed over with a false sweetness and muffled beneath concern

no end in sight to the squeezed so-called comfort, the staged theatrical dialogue, buzzing with a maddening hum overhead

Author's Note

I tried to experiment with different punctuation marks, varying the style of it. is it effective?

Reviews

[Brad Baum]

There is always so much going on in your writing. I love it. You are able to stay within a particular event/theme/descriptive voice, and yet you are able to touch on so many different subjects and contexts. Makes your writing very interesting to read, as well as challenging. It's fun to try and connect the dots.

As far as the punctuation goes, I honestly don't know if I would have noticed it if I had not read your note beforehand. I'm not sure what you are trying to do with it, but it's certainly interesting. Don't know if I can establish a connection between the meaning and the punctuation used, but that could probably be figured out with a few more reads. Or it's just me.

Overall, great write. Keep it up, yo!