1995

Three girls
In the backseat
Bob Evans parking lot witnesses
Mid-decade-Summer
That drawn line
That rhyme of reason
Graying hair and aviator glasses
Stolen kiss
Adultry sawed through bones
And broke everything in half

Flourescent light revisioned
Wrote him a letter
He already knew
Oblivious to the fact
Ten years later
I spy and five and ten go
Hand in hand placing slash marks
Like the devil and a reaper
He lost her
She took him away

Reviews

[Bruce]

very good I knew what it was about as soon as I started reading it. I want one poem from you a week.

[Amanda Avalon]

Thanks to everyone for your comments! This poem is in regards to my parents divorce and fathers death ten years later, and it's mental effects on me.

[Adam]

I love it. Creepy but good. Any particular story behind this, or was this just something floating in your head?

[Kristin Brecoe]

I agree with Kristen. I would love to know the story behind this one. And the imagery is lovely. Sometimes I didn't quite feel the flow of some of the lines... Maybe that's just me being tired?

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Great poem. I rather wish I knew the story behind it. It paints a vivid picture. I'm going to have to favorite this one. Very great. I love it.
KH

[lindsay]

Ooh. This as a creepy tone to it almost. I want to look away and keeping reading all at the same time. The imagery with " adultery sawed through bones/ and broke everything in half" is where I see that. Great job over all though.