Two of Cups, D Minor (Version II)

Version II- the only difference is line breaks.

My partner harbors dual polars that dry my insides
Then-
One upward glance
Spread out over
This levitated bed and
I’ve been lubricated
Bathed in bare
Eyes of panthers longing
Time-
Your taste of devil's flesh 
Within reach 

Mid-years’ bright
Lilacs struggle for survival

A season’s lack of chance
to drench within your element

In my head like a kick
you’ve replaced

The wolves howling
as summer digests fall

 

Barefoot in the kitchen, we wake
Play house

The balcony illuminated
Citrus rays, a saccarined kiss

Amidst this scene

Stolen from some other time
Past.

Author's Note

Which version do you think is best- this, or the previous one?

Reviews

[Bruce]

I like this one a bit better. the flow is good. and I like the subject matter as well. sorry for the last crude comment..