darkness

The darkness avails in my body

in my soul and my spirit

it consumes me, feeds on me

it surrounds me, and blocks 

even a pinch of light.

It dissolves me, and

makes me move like a fluid

it suffocates me 

it shakes me, and breaks me

and tangles me in a web...

but i hear a faint and feeble voice

a shadow appearing at a distance...

it holds my hand 

and rises me from the ground

it forces me to fight back 

it pushes me to make my stand 

i move ahead but fall apart

the voice yells, asks and begs me to stop

to stop from falling down

but slowly it fades away, 

it dies...it decays..

and many other fill the void

i hear voices disgracing me,

laughing and mocking  me,

i chase them,

i search for them

i yell...its not me

i'm not like this

I am strong...I am strong...

And then i fall down to my knees....

Author's Note

its crap and i know it...i just wrote it coz i didnt had anything to do at this time...

Reviews

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Dark, well-expressive write. Enjoyed this. Nicely done.

[Mockingbird]

expresses despair and a bleak sadness. there is a glimmer of hope before the voice fades away. then there are the mocking voices that make the person want to prove that they're strong but still doesn't have the strength. very powerful poem.

[just is]

Hey don't downgrade your work, Think postive. I really enjoyed this,
It has a depth and meaning to it. I loved the last two lines especially,
it hold character. Wonderful write.

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. it's not crap at all ... all of us have experienced this feeling at one point in time or another ... you expressed it very powerfully and vividly ... excellent poetry ... dark but full of heart ...