Marbled Prison

"I found the angel in the marble and I carved until I set it free." ~Unknown

 Gone is  normalcy  as we know it

 Slip your fingers past the sheer curtains labeled life

The lilies I lay here fastly will wither

Morning rips me from your side

Crack open my heart, pour forth the pain

Art is your lasting symbol, this angel of marble is all I have left

My love, one can not trap in a marbled eternal bedroom

Bitter disappointments devour and consume my vision of days ahead

Only a sweet flight to where you are will sooth the aching tears

Cradle me in your arms once again, tissue my raging fears of solitude

Reviews

[dark and twisty]

oh, gorgeous work, a work of art on its own..it's almost as if like a sculptor who carves an angel from a block of marble and feels as if he's freed the angel from its marble imprisonment, your words have released the raw agony edgy emotions within, turning an indistinguishable mass of pain into something far more beautiful, like a block of marble into a beautiful sculpture..

Btw, I'm not sure if you got the quote from Michelangelo, the famous Renaissance painter and sculptor but I'm pretty sure he said something along those lines as well...

[Ravenskald]

"My love, one can not trap in a marbled eternal bedroom
Bitter disappointments devour and consume my vision of days ahead"

Is a very interesting line, there is a disadvantage to the angel becoming real, freed from the eternal marble bedroom isn't there. The Angel becomes real gets upand goes to work and leaves you alone !
This seems to me to be about the conflict betwen the real and the ideal.
A very nice piece of work to read indeed !
~Raven

[Tovli]

a very wonderful poem, awesome lines. well done.

[J]

Ahhhhhh ...... you are a creatively accomplished poet, mon ami. Format adding compelling impetus. "tissue my raging fears of solitude" ~ wonderful! Rage against a needless degree of separation heartbreakingly apparent.

Well done!

j

[Larissa G.]

Oh wow.
And wow again.
This is perfectly formulated, I think. It makes us grasp for the meaning that we can give this from our own life. I especially love the line about life as a sheer curtain. Just beautiful.
Well done.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Morning rips me from your side

Crack open my heart

I love these lines above as well as

tissue my raging fears of solitude

Sal

[angelina neves]

wonderfully written and you painted beautiful the painfull emotions

[poddar kushal]

it is absolutely wonderful

[Helena]

Excellently written. I could not fault this one little bit.
The flow great, sentiments stunning, and you put to use the 10 words
to their very best advantage. Well done!

~ Helena ~

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow Laura such raw emotional work... your poem speaks tome of seeing the beauty in even the simplest of things. you are truly gifted my friend.