I passed Death on the Highway

I passed ol' Mr. Death on the highway

I waved hastily as I drove by

No way was I going to stop and say 'Hi'

He with in eighteen wheels and me in my four

I am a young mother and have much more life to explore

 

I passed ol' Mr. Death on the highway

I tried hard not to catch his gaze as I drove by

There is so much I have to do, I tried to justify

Ol' Mr. Death just nodded and gave me a little time more

I kissed my baby and tried to smile as my grateful tears hit the floor

Reviews

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

How eerie that I happened to read this poem about the danger of big trucks. We went to the movies this afternoon and followed a huge truck with an empty trailer that was weaving over the entire right lane of the freeway. I hope the driver got home without causing an accident. He was neither too tired, too preoccupied with his cell phone, or too drunk to be driving. Scary!! We did NOT pass him but watched as others did. Your poem is a great wake-up call for safety! Sharon

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I love this ! .... you succed to transfer your fear so well Thanks Yossi

[C.L. Wilson]

Well everyone is pretty much correct. Eerie. That's the word that naturally comes to me, and evidently everyone else, when I read this. Never thought death as a trucker, but than truckers see death as a black dog. I don't know if that's a stereotype or not. I apologize to all truckers if that is.

[Sean M. Addams]

love the eerie feel of this piece and ending really made it a nice powerful read.... nice job on this..

[Norma J. Jessee]

Those big rigs scare me also. My dad drove those big trucks and I rode with him sometimes and even inside the truck it was scary. There is so much power and you can feel it. Sitting up high looking down on the other vehicles is unbelievable. But being in one of the other vehicles is very frightening when you are close to one of the rigs. You feel as if you are being pushed off the road, or sucked under the tires.
Very original poem and beautifully written.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh I too get nervous when I pass a big rig on the highway... t always feels as if thy are drifting over to crush me... I very chilling and expressive piece of work.

[Richard McLin]

This is some of the best rhyme work I've seen in a while, not a big fan myself, but it was very well done here. This is something to be very proud of, and very very creepy. Good work.

Richard.

[Poeticpiers]

original in subject material Nice rhyming pattern but you need to work on your meter