Power in the Tongue

Power in the Tongue

5/24/18

"Oh, Watchman! Oh, Watchman! 

Let me out! Let me out!

For I have a work to do."

Cried the words of Bitterness and Strife 

As the Anger and Jealousy grew

"Nay!" Saith the Watchman

"You don't have a clue.

For if I let you go, even just a few-

Steal, Kill and Destroy 

Is all you will do."

"Oh, Watchman! Oh, Watchman!

Let me out! Let me out!

For I have a work to do."

Cried the words of Mercy and Grace

As compassion and love was overdue

"Go! Go at once." Granted the Watchman

"I release you at once.

For when I let you go, even just a few-

Peace, Hope and Joy

Will you breath into every life anew."

Psalm 141:3

Set a watch, O Lord, before my mouth; keep the door of my lips.

Psalm 139:4

For there is not a word in my tongue, but lo, O Lord, thou knowest it altogether.

Reviews

[Doug Jenkins]

Laura,

I really enjoyed this, especially the declarative request(s) to the Watchman. I found the rhythm of L4-5 and L14-15 distracting from the lines that directly precede them (L1-3, 11-13), and wished they had read a bit smoother.
I also think L9, "Steal, Kill and Destroy", would flow better if reversed, "Destroy, Kill, and Steal".

[BlackPrince]

This is such a wonderful powerful poem depicted so well with natural rhythm and smoothly occurring rhymes. I like how virtues and vices are personified and the former is preferred for wisdom's sake.

Well done

[Adam Adams]

not a bad shot. interestingly cummed into jahovic & philosophically acustica words.