I left the very last word blank for a reason. I'd prefer to keep my name somewhat anonymous, and that last word happens to be my first name. :P
I wrote this for my dad's 43rd birthday (wow, he sounds really old when you write it down). I know this isn't one of my best poems in terms of technicality, but it truly comes from the heart. Almost every stanza has a true story behind it, and if you're interested in what those stories are, feel free to message me about them. :)
Overall, what do you think?
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Sweet poem! :) Hope your dad LOVED it :D
But...43 is actually pretty young. My dad's 52, and I'm younger the you are Ally!!! :P
I love it! Sweetest birthday gift ever, I bet! ;)
Erm.. No. You call that old? My dad's 58 sweetheart. You're dad is a youngin'. YAY! HAPPY BIRTHDAY MR. ______ This poem was sweet. Smooth and well-written. Couldn't have made a better one myself. Seriously, mine would've been all mystic and shrouded and what not. :P Sometimes I loose the meaning of my poem behind painted glass.
Anyway, lovely write. :)
100, because I love the honesty and love I get off this poem.
This is very well written, and it is obviously very sentimental. I think your rhyme scheme was really nice, and the flow was very polished. I actually read the last line "Love, Blank" and it still kept the same rhythm.
This was the sweetest thing to give to your dad, ever ever (so sweet, I said ever twice).
From a teacher's perspective, a few lines were kind of choppy and out of place with the flow of words, but I bet this could be easily fixed with a read through. Beautifl and sweet! ;)
A lovely and heartfelt tribute! Well done. And 43 may seem old to you now, but I'm only nine years from there, and I'm just getting started! You'll see!
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